firiewww Its done.

You have got a nice story.

I read upto 7 to 8 chapters hope u don't mind.

So, u need to work hard on your writing.
I feel that your transition from one paragraph to another are not so smooth.

And a bit of problem with grammar here and there.

But overall, it was a light and fun read.

But work hard, I too face similar problems and am trying to improve too

      YoungOneStories

      I am done after a single chapter. I mean it was great, I will read in my free time as a reader.

      I already mentioned ur small problem in your review.

      You are doing great and just don't drop it.

      I even added it in my library.

      And just a personal advice.

      Don't make her grin, or else....

          Hello, the link to my novel. Even if I'm very interested in feedback (nobody has commented or reviewed it yet), I don't think I've enough time to swap review. If you're kind enough to do it, I'll try to do it for you but I can't promise it will be done immediately (maybe a few days, and probably no more than one review a day).

          The title is Moa, counter

          It's posted under the genre of War and Military but if you want to read a legit war and military novel, mine is probably not for you. My novel is a comedy, with an inspiration of initiatique journey adventure novel, picaresque influence, absurd and pataphysics; it's just that it didn't fit in other genres either and the story effectively take place during a war.

          The tags are : comedy, war, modern, aventure, action, parody, slice of life.

          The synopsis is as follow:
          Imagine a world where roller shutters is the promising area publicized by royalty. Imagine a world where Mikado and trunk throwing are the king-sports, moving and electrifying crowds. Imagine a world where beautiful mechanics are revered. Imagine a world where a butterfly wing-flap may or may not cause a downpour on the other side of the world. Imagine a world where the fundamental freedom is to wipe your backside with fleece triple-ply toilet paper in pure fir-wood.
          Well, as perfect as it can be, this world is at war.
          After several years of conflict, Moa, a non-commissioned officer, got up that morning to go to report...

          https://www.webnovel.com/book/16552689105354805/Moa%2C-counter

            Recommendation: Eden: Rise of The Fallen God
            https://www.webnovel.com/book/16139046705990305/
            Genre: Fantasy, Modern Society

            Since humanity was dominated by powerful beast gods with power over the elements, human ran away to the island of Eden, the only place the elemental beasts were incapable of reaching. A thousand years later after humans adapted to the power of the four primal elements, Roderick Graham, a genius swordsman who failed to become a Elemental Master and losing his arm in the process starts his journey with the discovery of a power beyond all.

            Thoughts: If everything goes right, this will have less than a hundred chapters with a average of a 1000 words per chapter. 24 chapters are done and the first arc had already finished. If you feel like reading short, but interesting story, then give it a try.(Sorry for my English, I just started leaning at the early 2018 and this is just my second novel.)

              Recommendation: Eden: Rise of The Fallen God
              https://www.webnovel.com/book/16139046705990305/
              Genre: Fantasy, Modern Society

              Since humanity was dominated by powerful beast gods with power over the elements, human ran away to the island of Eden, the only place the elemental beasts were incapable of reaching. A thousand years later after humans adapted to the power of the four primal elements, Roderick Graham, a genius swordsman who failed to become a Elemental Master and losing his arm in the process starts his journey with the discovery of a power beyond all.

              Thoughts: If everything goes right, this will have less than a hundred chapters with a average of a 1000 words per chapter. 24 chapters are done and the first arc had already finished. If you feel like reading short, but interesting story, then give it a try.(Sorry for my English, I just started leaning at the early 2018 and this is just my second novel. The reason I'm writing is also to learn more, so I'm thankful by any feedback you may give me.)

                Yorth i read it and it was very interesting and i like the worldbuilding too i reviewed it and added it to my collections and trust I'm being honest yous is better than mine lol please do make sure to review mine and please do be honest

                    Tittle: legends of Varlaurea - The Dragon Emperor
                    Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16438588006056705/Legends-of-Varlaurea%3A-The-Dragon-Emperor
                    Synopsis: “My journey through Varlaurea continent had lead me to a charming old temple, situated in the middle of a lush, emerald green bamboo forest. After sightseeing around the temple for a while, I realized that, this temple doesn’t worship any deity, but an emperor from ancient time. Curious, I asked the temple’s caretaker about the figure being worship here. The caretaker said, the person being worship here was called Emperor Suk Lam, the Dragon Emperor of the ancient Varlann Empire, a very respected heroic figure to the people, and even been considerate as the father of the people. Interested, I ask if there is any tale or legend attach to this emperor. With a face overflowed with proud, the caretaker nodded. And so, with a pot of tea and a few sweet buns, I sit there on the temple courtyard, listening to the fantastic tales of the Dragon Emperor Suk Lam, tales of his adventures, his battles against monsters and evil cultist.”
                    From “A Journey to Varlaurea Continent” by Chickknight Greenleaf
                    Chapter 4 “Myths and Legends of Varlaurea continent”
                    @yaoyueyi

                      Hi guys, I am a novice writer and an avid reader of fantasy. Thought I would promote my novel for critique as I do aim to improve. Here's my Link:
                      https://www.webnovel.com/book/16570293305419605/Of-God's-and-Men
                      And here is the synopsis:
                      ""A multi-perspective story that follows four very different characters as they uncover the truths of this world and the war that had started between the races. As the magic returns to this broken world, a question as old as time rises once again. What happened to the Gods?""

                      If anyone would be willing to give it a try I would be honoured. Thanks

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