MikXL_23 What if when the old man reincarnates into your fantasy world, he becomes younger?

Bear with me here. The idea is forming as I'm writing this.

He becomes younger but his mind is slowly recovering from being an old man. During his past life, he had Alzheimer's Disease, slowly forgetting and losing control of his body. With his new body, his memories are slowly returning but they come in scattered fragments, flashes of another life.

In the new world he meets his wife. In his first life, his wife left him early on in their marriage. Her life taken by an unfortunate accident when a tsunami struck their home. Of course, in her new life his wife has no memories of him nor their past. Yet, he still loves her. For better or worse, she was the only one he ever truly loved.

They spend their days happily falling in love once again. His second shot at living a full, happy life with her... is what he wanted but the will of the gods are not so benevolent. He was called there, summoned through a horrible ritual of tearing a soul from one body and replacing it with another.

A plaything for the gods, so to speak.

Disasters after another struck the small village he resided in. Floods, earthquakes, etc. Packs of wild beasts and monster razed houses, killing dozens. Caught in the crossfire, his wife is swept up in the game of gods.

Left alone once more, his heart shattered, our MC has once again lost his loved one to powers beyond him. He finds her bloodies body among the ruins of their village. Her smile sad and weak, one hand gingerly placed over her stomach. In this time of despair, more fragments of his mind return. A soft lullaby. Sweet, soothing humming filled a quiet room. Sitting there on a familiar chair was his wife, her belly a bulge. His baby. Their baby.

Twice, he's lost his wife. Twice, their unborn child has been killed. Twice, he was powerless to stop it.

Piqued by the circumstances of their new plaything, one god decided to have a little more fun. Mischievous and cunning, the god approaches the MC with a promise of power in exchange for a good show. The god also wishes for the demise of other gods but MC has already vowed to kill every god or goddess which makes the god who approached him more amused.

"Your hunger for revenge, the hatred and animosity welling up within you, I shall turn it into your strength. Now quickly, grow and kill us all. I'll be waiting."

To call it a blessing or a curse, the power bestowed onto him was something that could not be contained within a human vessel, morphing him into a powerful demon. The raw power inside threatened to burst free at any moment, twisting his mind and losing himself to insanity.

In that state of self torment, pain and anger, hundreds of year passed by. His demonic body unable to age. His mind no longer sane.

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Darn it. I wrote too much. Originally it was just going to be a general idea but then it kept growing and... yeah. In my mind I already have a couple of ideas of how it could end. Take my brain barf. Even now I'm stopping myself from continuing since I'm just supposed to give an idea, not a whole story in itself. I don't care if you do/don't use any of ideas I just wrote down.

Your post piqued me, much like the god in my idea, that is all.

Hopefully this helped?

    MikXL_23 I just sent you a review exchange offer, and hopefully (if you accept) my MC will fit the bill :)
    Though they are a female protagonist. Not sure if that matters xD

      Vera_Anne_Wolf Although I always avoid stories with female protagonists that doesn't mean I can't enjoy them, it's just that I'm very picky about it. I will check it out and I won't mind a review on my story, it can be a pretty harsh one too. I just need it to be a honest review so I can improve my writing. In my own self opinion, my book is pretty mediocre but that's just my perfectionism speaking so I just tend to ignore my self-reviews.

        Yuyumamoru Well... Thanks, you're a really creative author as I can see. Well, the MC does indeed become young again. And well, you just need to check it yourself then. A review swap is surely going to be helpful
        Name: Be Supreme!

          MikXL_23 Funny you mention honest reviews. I've actually had to reign in on my "honesty" because people take it personally and it reflects in their review swap xD Like, I'm usually honest because that is how I grew as a writer, learning from others critique--but it doesn't seem very welcome here on WN

            Vera_Anne_Wolf Hehe true. After my sense of criticism improved I've noticed that my novels are way worse than I've had thought they were before. Due to my inferiority complex I didn't really care about negative reviews since my thoughts always were "Well, since my novel sucks anyway then they are right"

              MikXL_23 As long as critiques show you what you can improve they're helpful for sure. Knowing how to take and use that only makes you a better writer. But you also have to take your share of "opinion" reviews that are just about the reader preferring things a different want and holding that against you. Those you're free to ignore and laugh about even.

                MikXL_23

                Vera_Anne_Wolf

                This conversation about reviews is great! My reviews are very in-depth and usually not 5-stars. Actually, I have given several 1/5 in the writing quality department alone for bad grammar. When I look at other reviews, they are all 4+ stars.

                Reviews on my stories usually are higher than I think they will be as well. On other sites, I’m unable to get rating higher than average. One uses an eight point scale, and my highest score is a 5.7 or so. I’m not an amazing writer. I know some basics, but I also appreciate real constructive criticism to help me improve.

                Seems like it is best to polish skills elsewhere...

                  MikXL_23

                  Wanna give my story a try? It's a transmigration where the MC is still in college, but in the process of maturing. Though he has his faults in the beginning, he grows through his own ways and tries to think through things rather than jump into combat.

                  Title: My attack stat is negligible...

                    shadowdrake27
                    that is very good. There are many reviews i see on this site that are simply just a pointless 5 star with no real critique. I, by all means, am not a master writer. But seeing stories have 5 stars and a generic "wow this was great! Will definitely read more" is kind of a joke. Lots of writers also delete any reviews below a 4 star, (i wont name them, but i know quite a few guilty people). So getting reviews with critique should be taken as more of a gift, even if its not a 5 star review.

                    edit:only if the review is actually good that is. A 1 star rating saying "dumb dumb dumb dumb" is obviously not critique.

                      Snowin

                      I agree. My current process is to rate the story, and use the comment to tell the author what each separate category was rated. Of course, I also tell the author why the rating was where it was for each category. This way you could look at the review, understand it, and know how to improve.

                      It takes more work, but I’m hoping this helps people with their stories more.

                        _Neeraj_

                        I guess. Be patient though, I have one more review swap to do and then three stories I wanted to read for fun. I’ll add it to the library and get to it though. If you want to swap my book is called ‘Destiny Dating’.

                        Also, sorry for hijacking this thread. I didn’t mean to, haha.

                          _Neeraj_

                          shadowdrake27

                          Well, I won't mind a review swap from anyone. You guys can be pretty harsh on it too, as long as it isn't merely insults. I want a honest review so I can improve my writing quality which I believe to be simply mediocre at the moment. I'm also confident in my reviews about fantasy stories too, but I would need to get hooked up on the story if I want to accurately give a decent review.
                          Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/16168488805065705/Be-Supreme!

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