Pleasedeteme

If you give me a title of something you are working on, I can try to take a peek and do a chapter review or something. I’ve just been really slow and unmotivated lately, so I’ll make no promises. Also, my reviews are typically harsh. I’ll point out what you do good as well, but there is a good chance that I say at least a few negative things about what you wrote.

I’ve never read supreme magus, so I have no opinion. I started reading “Release That Witch“ and it was pretty good. I wouldn’t say it was my favorite story on the site even. This app is sort of like where I go to write stories on my phone, so I don’t follow a ton of books on here.

      Pleasedeteme I kinda like u so Ive been following u for a bit but dont expect good authors here to follow a good story line. Because most stories here either follow a wuxian cliche formula or an OP isekai type, in which a linear story that only focuses on strength development (not character because their personalities are akin to a line, unchanging and boring).

      Most of their works follow a wish fullfillments, I mean nothing wrong with that but if u break it down, the flaw is very glaring.

      Real story requires struggle and requires the MC to be a dynamic character, Harry goes to several phases, while characters here will feel kinda the same from start to finish.

      You know I could give u some advices, Im not the best author, But I know some stuffs about writing.

        Pleasedeteme Oh boy. All I can say is, all the literature masterpieces that I've read have been books by people like Charles Dickens or Ray Bradbury or John Steinbeck...I doubt that you could compare works on this site to those by people like them.

          Pleasedeteme I haven't read all of his, but I really love Oliver Twist and A Tale of Two Cities. Tale of Two Cities seems more of a classic than the former. One key to becoming a classic is to have really deep and complex themes. Which is why studying classic lit is such a helpful tool to writers.

          But out of everything I read this year, I have to say that East of Eden by John Steinbeck is definitely at the top. Of course, not everything has to have big words to be a classic; My Sweet Orange Tree by José Mauro de Vasconcelos and The Little Prince by Antoine de Saint-Exupéry are also among my favorites. Really, it doesn't matter how complex your prose is, as long as you have something meaningful to say.

          So while you may not be able to find the next J.K. Rowling on this site, reading classic lit and studying why these works are classics is a huge step in helping writers grow. It's kinda like having the author mentor you, in a way :).

          I aspire to write works like the ones above one day, and to publish them in real life, but I still have a long way to go and lots to learn. So I'm using this site to help me practice my skills and spending time reading a lot of good books. After all, reading is the other side of writing.

          I feel like I went down bit of a rabbit hole, but I hope this helps. Good luck to you on your writing journey! :)

              Pleasedeteme if you're looking for pieces similar to traditional publishing, I would say there aren't much. That type of writing is not popular in online novels with hundreds or thousands of chapters.

              Most online readers have short attention span. There is usually a suggested word count for each chapter. They came from a study at how long it would take for a reader to be bored from reading one chapter. Not all authors follow it since it depends on the story and the genre.

              Pieces like Harry Potter and such have a slow build up since they're world building a lot. If you cut it down to 1.5k words each chapter, nothing much would have happened in that length. Having that mindset, most online writers would use more simple words and phrases plus change the pace of the story to invite a wider audience.

              Taking Harry Potter as an example, for online platforms like WN, I'd immediately cut to the trip to the zoo where Harry discovers he could understand snakes and frees one with magic. This would attract interest. It's about being efficient in intriguing the readers, building up the world setting and understanding the character.

                Pleasedeteme isn't is obvious why it's popular? Because people like it. They like the plot, the writing style, the characters, the world building. We all have different opinions, I didnt like it the moment it said it was an "infant to supreme magus" journey.

                How the fuck would I know its flaws? Like I said before, if I don't like the sypnopsis then I don't read it. I call it trash because it's my opinion, simple as that.

                    shadowdrake27 Omg, can you read some chapters of mine as well. I want a genuine review ( be as harsh as you can). I tried review swap but none of them seem genuine enough to me. Like I want to know where I'm lacking.
                    Title: Death Goddess Reborn 😞
                    P.s. I'm not trying to promote my novel, I just want a critique

                        Lullabybao

                        This is a trap I set for myself...

                        I’ll read the first chapter and leave comments. Again, I might only point out the bad things because the goal is improvement. There are likely a lot of great things about your writing as well.

                        I will not do a “review” because I can’t accurately judge your whole story by the first chapter. Look for paragraph and chapter comments.

                            I think that as a beginner level writer, going on to read novels from award winning authors as a form of study isn't the best idea. You should first just read a lot of novels or well written content of any kind (fanfictions, articles, the stories in a fifth grade English book). Once you have done that you'll develop an instinctual understanding of how to write. This is how I ended up becoming good at english. Even now many people with far worse essay writing skills than me have a better idea of grammar. I can't teach someone english without having to relearn the basics of grammar myself. It's a form of common sense for me in the way I write. Do I sometimes make errors? Yes. Anyone can make mistakes. But I never read so many things, or watched all those shows and movies in order to learn english. It just happened on its own.

                            So before you start critically analyzing any big novels, you should just read a lot of things to develop a basic sense. Idk how to describe it better than this but it's like an acquired passive feature that takes a lot of experience in reading.

                            shadowdrake27 Honestly I did review swaps and after receiving perfect reviews from people I felt too bad giving them bad ones due to their grammar or like other poorly developed elements. I tried to hint at it or openly leave a comment but I fear that they'd think I'm being rude or something.
                            But as a new author if I don't participate in this kind if stuff I don't think I'd get a lot of attention.

                                itsmeTuba

                                I understand that. Often I would write tons of examples and explanations for how I think someone could improve, only to see that their review said, “wow, you used words! 5/5 keep writing!”

                                You should do whatever you want to (or need to) do in order to achieve your goals. I don’t care if people think I’m rude, so I’m not afraid to leave a 1/5 in grammar with the comment, “I can’t read this.” However, I did receive some good reviews through the swaps. Likewise, some stories were great! It’s just easy to tell when someone is looking to trade 5 star reviews.

                                If the goal is to spread your own novel, doing review swaps is a great idea. They might like your book and continue to read it. If not, this app tracks the number of people who have your book in their library, so it still increases your stats. Nothing wrong with that. Nor do you have to leave critical (I would call them “good”) reviews.

                                  Pleasedeteme Strength of the supreme magus: Good backstories, good world building, MC and system

                                  Flaws: Gets boring several chapters later, does a lot of asspulls, the arcs get repetitive.

                                    Pleasedeteme Honestly I haven’t read that much classics, But out of the ones I read in Fantasy, I would say A story of ice and fire, The thing I like about is the immense details it has, The guy practically writes a paragraph to explain how the jewellery looks or how the environment feels like. This is a personal opinion, I dropped it at book 6 because of the same point of too much details.
                                    On this site I would suggest “Lord Of The Mysteries”. The author really developed a lot during his few books, And after about 500 chapters this book is damn jewel. For me The epitome of writing is creating a world. And this guy did just that, He created a freaking world. The best thing about this book is how much stuff is going on. With great numbers pf classes (22 * 9), Great number of cities, Countries their cultures. So much. It almost felt like I was reading about a real world and not a book.

                                        Pleasedeteme
                                        Strengths: Smooth pace, weak to strong, somewhat enjoyable, fast updates, no beating around the bush,

                                        Weaknesses: Stupid MC, the side characters are forgettable excpet Layla or Vorden, its riddled with cliche, illogical world building, short chapters, too much bullying, stuff happens because plot.

                                            shadowdrake27 Thank you so much for your comments. I actually learned a lot by rereading your suggestions in these two days. And I could somehow feel my writing style has improved a lot. I hope to continue improving as a writer. So any day you wish to read my book again I would proudly say it's all because of you. I just wanted to thank you again nothing much.

                                                Lullabybao

                                                You might be giving me too much credit, but I appreciate it. I’m glad that my comments made sense and have helped you. As you continue to write, and continue to get feedback, your writing will improve. Enjoy the process and have fun with it! I’ll also continue to read, write, and get better. One day, I look forward to reading your refined writing style!

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