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Doing original novel reviews, please post below
Hello! Could you please review mine?
https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-mischievous-maiden-the-sleeping-prince_15473894706673305
AuHNG Please Review mine if you like it.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/love-or-obsession_17764438905773305
No problem, only unlocked chapters, and as much chapters as you're willing, too. It's enough for me! 
It would be absolutely rude to ask more.
If you are interested, here's mine. Thank you very much!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-final-act_18023426906124805
In the first paragraph, tense changes way too many times.
The present tense is also awkward for a novel, so do keep that in mind.
Past tense is usually standard. We use present tense for more personal/awkward viewpoints.
This is a nitpick, but if you want your novel to sound less like Wattpad fanfic writing, just switch out the Isla P.O.V. for just "Isla" at the top.
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So far, nothing has happened (well, the pace is slow). finished reading. Overall, refrain from reviewing, but you need to fix some of your grammar.
Well as you are helping out here I would also request your inputs on my writing. I haven't updated in a long time, but I still write and would like to hear your views as I didn't really get much from readers online lol
https://www.webnovel.com/book/ordain_16716615606085605
AuHNG Just trying to learn the ropes of writing a ML story, but it has a lot of different elements than idk mainstream ones so not too sure ;-;
https://www.webnovel.com/book/pentakill-rebirth-of-the-legend_18491490905883305
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Overall, decent writing. Some grammar mistakes. I put suggestions in your comment, if you want to do a swap with me, I'll send you my novel too. I think your story is very female oriented, and really really compelling, minor editing issues.
The only problem I have with romance is that I read way too much of it, so it is personally boring to me. I think I've read every genre there is: GL, BL, CEO, wolves, vampire, sub/dom, first love, school love, harem, reverse harem, revenge fantasy etc. However, romance can really spice up a plot if it isn't the only overarching theme.
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Your writing is really good, there are times however, where I feel like you use a complicated word that isn't really revealed in the context, what that meaning of the word is. It's okay to use more complex words, but you have to keep in mind your readers demographic, and their vocabulary levels. Many readers are international on web novel. You could definitely help them out, by perhaps giving more context. It's good not to be too winded. Overall, refrain until I finish reading more chapters.
(Aka I will continue reading later)
blurb, king avatar's vibe, can be good for pulling in readers who want another similar experience. Follow Up in a second.
Very engaging. Your writing style is not the most unique, but I guess that's because it works really well for your novel format. (This isn't a bad thing, I'm just saying).
Overall, good introduction to your novel.
Main character sounds like one of those arrogant, cool, shameless dudes. Personality wise, it's been done before, but if you do it well, it could work. Remember with an overpowered character- you have to give the character some unique acidity that helps him not seem like a Mary Sue. Follow up once I finish reading.