Midnight_Alpha

So far, nothing has happened (well, the pace is slow). finished reading. Overall, refrain from reviewing, but you need to fix some of your grammar.

      IrisSky

      Overall, decent writing. Some grammar mistakes. I put suggestions in your comment, if you want to do a swap with me, I'll send you my novel too. I think your story is very female oriented, and really really compelling, minor editing issues.

      The only problem I have with romance is that I read way too much of it, so it is personally boring to me. I think I've read every genre there is: GL, BL, CEO, wolves, vampire, sub/dom, first love, school love, harem, reverse harem, revenge fantasy etc. However, romance can really spice up a plot if it isn't the only overarching theme.

        IrisSky

        I will refrain from voting until I'm done reading more chapters.

            SrtaA

            Your writing is really good, there are times however, where I feel like you use a complicated word that isn't really revealed in the context, what that meaning of the word is. It's okay to use more complex words, but you have to keep in mind your readers demographic, and their vocabulary levels. Many readers are international on web novel. You could definitely help them out, by perhaps giving more context. It's good not to be too winded. Overall, refrain until I finish reading more chapters.

            (Aka I will continue reading later)

                Saeven07

                Decent introduction into your novel. I think it's pretty good 9/10.

                follow up in a min.

                  Saeven07

                  You have developed a good author's style, and I can see that through the voice/diction of certain sentences.
                  Good job. No comment on plot/characters of yet.

                      Tangerqueen

                      blurb, king avatar's vibe, can be good for pulling in readers who want another similar experience. Follow Up in a second.

                          Tangerqueen

                          Very engaging. Your writing style is not the most unique, but I guess that's because it works really well for your novel format. (This isn't a bad thing, I'm just saying).

                          Overall, good introduction to your novel.

                              one_chance

                              Main character sounds like one of those arrogant, cool, shameless dudes. Personality wise, it's been done before, but if you do it well, it could work. Remember with an overpowered character- you have to give the character some unique acidity that helps him not seem like a Mary Sue. Follow up once I finish reading.

                                  AuHNG Thanks for the feedback! Honestly, I haven't read the King's Avatar lol but some people seemed to have mentioned it?

                                      IrisSky I'll read the first chapter and give you some feedback as well, but you also need to work on your synopsis. It doesn't tell me much.

                                        AuHNG your feedback is appreciated, thank you very much!

                                            @NoahSky Is review swapping allowed outside of the official November 2020: Review Swap, the one posted by yaoyueyi? 👀👀👀

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