Hi. I am looking for somebody to give feedback on the first three chapters.

Title: The Isekai Game
Genre: Action-Fantasy. Female MC with strong gaming elements.

Link:

https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/17820121405067005?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4313578440

Vanessa is an Italian High School Senior who has moved to Miami next to an Isekai Game Studio. She takes advantage of this opportunity to achieve her dream of becoming a Pro-Isekai Game Player. She does so by joining a guild of misfits (The Wild Bunch) and fights in various themes each month at the studio.
From orcs and demons to assassins, angels, and other players. Will Vanessa defeat them all and live the adventurous life as a pro player? Or will she and her friends abandon their families and dream to join the corporate life after high school?
come find out in The Isekai Game.

"In life, we expect the villain to be on the other side of the fence.
But typically, the villain is eating at our table".

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    Synopsis
    Dave Dalton, a physicist loses his fiancΓ© who he treasured dearly. He attempts to go back in time to protect her but his battle is against his irreversible fate. Would nature accept this reverse?

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