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Hi people! I'm a new writer here on webnovel, i'm trying to polish my skills, it would mean a lot to me if you could check my novel out and give me a feedback be it here or in the form of a review,

i've been scammed before lol so i'll be reading and dropping my honest review on your story as soon as i see your review on my book/feedback here on the comment section hehe

Thank you

https://www.webnovel.com/book/3-hours---a-gamble-of-time._18404695405551305 is my link

ONGOING. ROMANCE, SCI-FI, SUSPENSE, POETIC, time travel.

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I also dont mind review swapping with anyone else who may cover any type of genres, I LOVE TO READ! SO TAG ME HERE OR DROP A REVIEW , YOU CAN ALSO DM ME ON INSTAGRAM WITH UR LINK and I shall read -

    bishop1275

    sure, review first, and I'll review you by later today. My story is only 2000 words, so it shouldn't take you very long.

      Gaureeey just read your story and dropped a review. Very well written for a new writer. Great job!

        Gaureeey my book: https://www.webnovel.com/book/citrigar-of-eons-and-dreams_18820141906312905/the-dragon-and-the-clover_50520468268049574

        It's not bad, but in the first chapter, I immediately see some ways you can make it flow better. You include 2 anaphora; There is the one about the color brown and the one where you use "wouldn't". Personally, I find the one about brown to be a bit excessive, but that's also a nitpicky opinion. The one with "wouldn't" is a bit more problematic. Using it a second time so soon runs the risk of the technique being repetitive. Those three sentences also don't feel very connected at all. I would consider writing it as one speech segment rather than three separate questions.

        There are also some redundancies in other parts. Where you write "It would never be the same..." I would expect the character to be hurting physically if they were gripping their heart.

        I would definitely stay away from stuff like Dave is having a minor flashback after blacking out on the floor There are many other ways to set up/describe a flashback. Though its not necessarily a novel, Orange is a manga that has a ton of flashbacks. You can check it out and see how the describe it or set it up. Just having a message like that kinda makes it weird to read.

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