Not a review swap, but free collection adds
your novel has a similar beginning to two webtoons I read, something about princesses, a father who's kind of a douche, and a sexist society that the fl has to change.
I didn't like reading them.
Anyways, I dunno, I'll continue reading maybe later. Chapter 6 right now.
four novels? wow.
I don't read locked novels, but it seems like your last novel is decently popular with 200 collections, which is pretty great.
Tell me one book to read specifically, and I'll add it to my collection, but I am too tired to read four books right now.
Chapter 1: Don't do this.
If you're going to do this, make it a bit more interesting, like maybe add their favorite foods or something.
You don't want character cards.
Or,
if you want something interesting, maybe write one chapter where you incorporate all those character traits. But whatever, since you already done that, all I'm saying is make that character list more interesting.
AuHNG
I understand that we have different preferences. Still I appreciate the time you spent reading it. At least you think my writing was not bad, which was what I was going for.
This is my first time to write, so I am still trying to get the feel of it. Developing my style and trying to gauge the interest of the readers. I am slowly learning from the critics and suggestions that I am getting from people like you who are not afraid to say the truth.
I was not expecting it to be phenomenal, but if I could entertain a few readers, then it would be great. I still want to give quality books that is worthy of a person’s time, so I really wanted to improve on it.
Thanks again for saying your opinion about it.
Don't write in present for novels, except for certain scenarios, first person perspective, and interpersonal/command usages. Novels generally should be with past tense. Present tense is very exposition-heavy, like someone is describing something to you, versus actually being immersed in the novel itself.
Anyways, I'll continue reading before I add any further critique
Also that, plus romance is like a genre that I over-read. I've read at least a hundred webtoon this year, and around 50 novels? Anyways, a good majority of them have romance. I would say that only a handful are romance-oriented and I actually enjoyed.
Try to see which romance novels you really like and emulate their style.
Also stay away from tropes.
ok maybe I'll enjoy it. I like thriller.
advice replace said with different words occasionally. Not gonna say anymore, until I read more.
I skipped to the latest chapters and they show extreme development in grammar and writing abilities, but the beginning is really hard to get through. Seems like the development is good tho. I really suggest for now, going back and editing past chapters.
Here's mine if you want to take a look Sea of the Forsaken
I'll go ahead and add yours to my collection
You need to be better at establishing atmosphere for a thriller novel.
Your blurb feels like a summary for a book report rather than an actual blurb.
Anyways, gonna continue reading.
Your writing has developed a style which is good, I can immediately see that in the first few paragraphs.
bad news is that some parts are still awkward strung together.
Characters are pretty distinct from another, but I really don't want to read another romance, so I might continue it later. added to collection.
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AuHNG Yes, I'm so inspired and a fan of Heaven. is it because it has the same element? It's fine if you don't like it, tho. I just want to know 
I'm good with that, also I'll edit the blurb, and I'm still improving my writing. thank you for checking it out!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/100-days-to-make-the-ceo-love-me_18434215605656405
Hi, this is a CEO and romance story so I am not quite sure if you'll like it. Have a great day!
I was reading really fast, but I'll see if it improves, good luck!
I was a really bad writer when I started writing, everyone is constantly improving.
one thing I recommend is working with an outline, and not making the romance cringy.
That's all I can say, cause tbh, most romance is cringy to me lol.
pretty cool.
How come it doesn't have more views?
I guess it's harder to get noticed on web novel now after they started promoting mostly featured novels.
Oh, your novel got restricted, I think.
That's probably why.
You might want to appeal with web novel or something.
AuHNG thank you for your opinion, yea tbh the first chap to me is cringy lmao but thank you again
AuHNG thank you for your opinion, yea tbh the first chap to me is cringy lmao but thank you again
Hi! Why don't you try this one!
When a mundane, idyllic life is finally disrupted by approaching death, unraveling memories, strange conversations, and blossoming love.
June is your typical high school loner who prefers to use her astronomical brain to question the world than learn how to make friends. Others think she's spoiled, snobbish, arrogant, but within her is three years' worth of forgotten memories she cannot pull to the surface and strings of complexities from being an adopted child. However, one day as she winds up on her haunted territory to eat lunch, she sees a rather unexpected presence; the school's dreamy hero, Daire, who seems to be hiding a life-changing mystery.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/death-is-beautiful..._18788658906170105
AuHNG I can totally agree on what you said. I will edit the chapters. Thank you for the advice!
Hello okay, I'm interested, you can try mine if you like.
I was on hiatus, an I'm back to continue my book.
I will collect yours...
good night
AuHNG It didn't do well on webnovel, dunno why. I just contracted it to another site and have been posting it there. It's hard for any new themes to do well on webnovel
Here's mine: http://wbnv.in/a/6aFmfs8
