Nightsummer20 done, I added yours to my library its awesome and I even send you a balloon. Because it was amazing!

      Venusean done with you!

      Didn't expect it to be that good, I've added it in my collection. I'll be following your masterpiece in the future. Hah.. it's gives me new vocab.

          Nightsummer20

          Hey!

          I must say I absolutely love your story!
          Actually I already had it in my library and try to keep up with it regularly. I like the way you slowly but properly show how the MC's and the Alessandro brother's bond deepens and grows stronger.

          I hope you check out my story and leave some advice for me so that I can write so well like you as well.

          Thank you!

              Ezckapel done with you!

              I say, hey! Why are all of you so good at making stories 🤧🥺.

              Hehe. I really enjoyed your novel. I have added it in my collection. I'll keep reading the following chapter when I'm freed up.

                  Dazzling_Verdict Done! Thank you for sharing your work! I love the story goes well.

                  I only have a suggestion some can be written as words than to be told.
                  For example 1 hour later, 2 minutes after. After 10 minutes.
                  You can set them as words to make the novel pleasing to read, I don't mind it. It just my personal preference.
                  You may write them like this:
                  Instead of writing 1 hour later, you may write it as "An hour later, (follow up on what's going on.)"
                  Then: 2 minutes and 10 minutes, can be rewritten as. A few minutes after or Several minutes later.

                  It's ok not to be very detailed about the time, let your readers get into your story and be the characters. Don't give exact details, give them a few and let them explore it. I'm also a new writer and not very talented, I still kept on exploring and learning.

                      Dazzling_Verdict I'll be reading through yours in the future too! I have a problem with pacing and yours has really good pacing so I'll be learning a bit from you!
                      Thank you!
                      Have a great day :)

                        kuhaku_sora Yes that's right, this was my first mistake when I'm writing a story. I'm still learning the tenses in my story. Well, sharing is caring! Let's all bloom as a writer.

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