Cyclxne Thank you for sharing your story, and I like it. But, yeah, my story stability updates are not good since I'll be updating the story only on Monday and Friday. Also, I have exclusive contracts with another platform that I need to update every day, so the update here is very slow.
Anyways thanks for the review!
Alancaster I'm sorry for the long wait. I read until chapter 10. I love how the dialog was written. I'm hooked to this type of story. I'm usually a romance writer from other platforms and trying a fantasy story on this platform.
It's impressive that with every passing I read, I can't stop. LOL! I'll add yours to my library and read it later.
Alancaster Thanks, I'm reading yours now.
Title: HELL HEAVEN SECRET AGENCY
SYNOPSIS:
100 years ago, the world merged into one, the world of humans, demons, angels, and beasts. But in this world, humans have more advantages as their technology is rising rapidly. The other beings are demon populations on the verge of extinction as the alliance of humans, angels, and the beast constantly hunts them.
The demon lord was weak, and he commands the high and greater demons to infiltrate and breed with humans to increase their numbers. The dark angels and savage beast joined and to create a massive army of halfbreed humans. To destroy the alliances. The plan was successful, and they made a secret group known only in the underworld called Heaven Hell Secret Agency. A group that helps other races not limited to demons survive this rash world and slaughter the greedy human official who keeps controlling other races to dominate the world.
LINK: https://www.webnovel.com/book/hell-heaven-secret-agency_20544453306517405###
Arlemit I'm done giving you reviews.
I can only suggest fixing the paragraphs and indents for the sounds like boom, woosh.
Good use of terming sound, but much more if you give it an impact.
After the description of the sound, put the bracket. [BOOM!] [WOOSH] [SWING] [RING] if you want to catch the reader's attention on what sound it is. You may remove them, actually, since you already describe them in the story, yet that's only my suggestion.
Good job writing it!
Cyclxne
Alancaster
Arlemit
A_lucid_Dreamer
Matthew_Chuang
Will you give a review to mine, and I'll review yours. Here's the link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/hell-heaven-secret-agency_20544453306517405
Synopsis:
100 years ago, the world merged into one, the world of humans, demons, angels, and beasts. But in this world, humans have more advantages as their technology is rising rapidly. The other beings are demon populations on the verge of extinction as the alliance of humans, angels, and the beast constantly hunts them.
The demon lord was weak, and he commands the high and greater demons to infiltrate and breed with humans to increase their numbers. The dark angels and savage beast joined and to create a massive army of halfbreed humans. To destroy the alliances. The plan was successful, and they made a secret group known only in the underworld called Heaven Hell Secret Agency. A group that helps other races not limited to demons survive this rash world and slaughter the greedy human official who keeps controlling other races to dominate the world.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/hell-heaven-secret-agency_20544453306517405
PGODofficial Done!
Check mine as well https://www.webnovel.com/book/mr.-writer's-lovers-block-%5Bbl%5D_20233406106497505
Adetayo_Olajesu Done giving a review, I hope you read mine as well. XD
https://www.webnovel.com/book/mr.-writer's-lovers-block-%5Bbl%5D_20233406106497505
PGODofficial Hey I failed to reply here, since I'm away revising my works since many good authors pointed my flaws. I love them! Hahaha...
I'll review yours. Here is mine as well, https://www.webnovel.com/book/mr.-writer's-lovers-block-%5Bbl%5D_20233406106497505
Adetayo_Olajesu Hey, sure. I failed to notice this because I'm currently revising my work.
Here is mine, https://www.webnovel.com/book/mr.-writer's-lovers-block-%5Bbl%5D_20233406106497505
I'll read yours now while I'm resting, haha.
Dazzling_Verdict You're welcome!
I love how you guys write your stories :3! After my project this Pride Month. I'll be posting my first FANTASY ACTION.
I was inspired by how you guys wrote them.
kuhaku_sora Yes that's right, this was my first mistake when I'm writing a story. I'm still learning the tenses in my story. Well, sharing is caring! Let's all bloom as a writer.
Dazzling_Verdict Thank you! I added your story as well in my library. I will wait how Feng Shaotian developed a strong character!
Dazzling_Verdict Done! Thank you for sharing your work! I love the story goes well.
I only have a suggestion some can be written as words than to be told.
For example 1 hour later, 2 minutes after. After 10 minutes.
You can set them as words to make the novel pleasing to read, I don't mind it. It just my personal preference.
You may write them like this:
Instead of writing 1 hour later, you may write it as "An hour later, (follow up on what's going on.)"
Then: 2 minutes and 10 minutes, can be rewritten as. A few minutes after or Several minutes later.
It's ok not to be very detailed about the time, let your readers get into your story and be the characters. Don't give exact details, give them a few and let them explore it. I'm also a new writer and not very talented, I still kept on exploring and learning.