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I'll work on yours as well. It will take me some time so, expect it in about a day. I have two books. One with over 50 chapters and one with less chapters, but it only has around 11 story chapters.

    DjxCarma I suppose I'll read the one with 50 chapters. I'll give my review in like a day or two so it'll take some time.

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        DjxCarma I'm doing SternKunst at the moment. But, thank you very much for the criticism of my story. I think I can improve a lot now after reading yours and Starcraft's reviews!

        Have a look at my new Dark Fantasy novel that I submitted to the WSA called Plastic Primrose.
        https://www.webnovel.com/book/plastic-primrose_23285027805686305
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        [Mature Content Warning]
        Sitting down in front of her television, Selma Walsh watches in horror and disgust as a former classmate's name is broadcasted in the weekly execution schedule. Growing up in the New American Coalition has conditioned Selma to seeing these atrocious acts as just normal occurrences, no matter how terrible they are. However, seeing the name of someone she once loved leaves her feeling truly afraid of her fate.
        Centuries after the 5th World War has left most of the United States uninhabitable, the NAC remains as the only safe haven for human life in Eastern America. However, with fanatical leaders left wishing and romanticizing life before the Darkness, strict laws were placed.
        Now, once a child becomes an adult, they are expected to be married and to immediately start a family. Those that are not, are conscripted into the military for skirmishes in areas outside of the safe havens.
        All for the betterment of humanity.

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