creativewritting Thanks.
I have to say that English is not my first language. So something that makes sense in my head. Doesn't really translate on the paper. But, I would like to improve and make my novel a better read for the readers.
Looking forward to your insights and I really appreciate your help.
Thanks for all your effort! You're truly helping a lot of us authors through your reviews.
If you have the time, I hope, you could review my novel, too, since I didn't get much reader feedback till now
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10609838905077905/Oh.-My.-Fate%3F!
Genre: Romance Fiction
Updates: daily, 2 regular chapters + 1 additional chapter might be released
What I think about it as an author: This novel is basically a mix of different genres. Romance Fiction being the underlying main genre, but that aspects starts a little late, so I'm not really sure, if it's okay for the audience of Romance novels. I also do know there are some grammatical errors, though I'm working on it at the moment.
mud7 Hello mud, a better way to improve your language is to read what you wrote out-loud it is the method I used mostly. Sometimes when I am driving for long, I would speak to myself a script I was thinking about, for example, "9 years ago my friend betrayed me, took away my wife, family, and friends. I trusted him more than I had trusted myself, Today... I am a monster, I am the one and only king of this land!" sounds idiotic but during the time I am speaking to myself, I will try to fix the mistakes or change the entire script to make it more interesting to myself and others reading it.
Example 2 after thinking about it and reading it loud:
"My friend, you have changed me, took away everything I had, my entire life for nine years has been to survive after your betrayal" Sigh looking at the cold body that is hanging on my left hand, I spoke with rage "Was it worth it?!"
Hopefully, this can help you out a bit, good luck and keep up the good work!
-DKQ
yansusustories Oh my fate... A masterpiece of ages! Have been following this and I have many things to talk about! Issues are found in every novel, but yours is unique, reading it once, you will never notice anything unless you are a graduate student or above, the idea is portrayed in a very fantastic way which intrigues the reader to continue from chapter 1 to the end without stopping! (Happened to me) The issues within are something that can be seen after focusing on the story. The first significant issue is the title, yes having the same title for several chapters is terrible, it shows the reader that the story will be focused on that location or fight for a long time. To fix this, I would recommend having a variety of titles, and this alone can improve the quality of the entire novel!
As I have explained some of the issues, the rest is to be done by re-reading your old chapters which is the best way to improve yourself! Good luck and keep up the good work! (If you wish for more assistance discord is available)
Reference to help out with those issues:
https://www.wattpad.com/298184109-writing-tips-naming-your-book-chapters
http://grammar.yourdictionary.com/punctuation/when-to-use-ellipses.html
https://www.englishpractice.com/common-mistakes/commonly-confused-prepositions/
http://www.softschools.com/examples/grammar/possessive_adjectives_versus_possessive_pronouns_examples/82/
-DKQ
DKQ Oh my god, thank you so much! Commas and prepositions aside, I never would have thought about those things ... I'm gonna start editing right tommorow morning. :)
Hello everyone!
We are still looking for editors and reviewers who are free to help authors whenever they can. If you guys are interested you can join the discord server and contact DKQ or Creativewriting.
-DKQ
Hi guys. I started working on my story. Right now i have created 6 chapters. I have uploaded 2, and i am editing the other 4, they should be uploaded between today and tomorrow. And i will keep uploading 2 chapters daily.
I would love some feedback and thank you
NAME: The Great Realm Portal
GENRE: Fantasy
LINK: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10674708505099705/The-Great-Realm-Portal.
There may be some grammatical errors, but this is my first novel. I missed the deadline to have a free book cover, so i had to hire someone to create it for me. Thank you for the support guys.
Name: Game For Rogue
GENRE: Fantasy
https://www.webnovel.com/book/10735716005149805/Game-For-Rogue
The world had people who called who rogue who challenged towers to get the relic of the universe or rotu.
It's about a human who turned into a lizardman after an unpredictable event to try to save his friends but failed.
FrankG Hello Gpowez, I just finished reading the first chapter of the novel, a great work with a few mistakes during the middle parts. First I would like to mention some issues relating to split infinitive (a construction consisting of an infinitive with an adverb or other word inserted between to and the verb) it is very rare to see this type of mistake but it also shows your writing skills, this mistake was seen during the first chapter:
"to fully open his eyes" I thought it was normal at first but after my friend read it he said it is supposed to be written this way "to open his eyes fully" and that it was a mistake done by bachelor undergraduate students. Let us discuss several issues and then I can link references to rely on:
A great story and a fresh idea to most of us, I personally liked it and truthfully it was hard to find issues within the first chapter, i had to get a friends help for a few of them as I was not sure about it but in the end we found them and thankfully stated the first three important ones, the rest are minor mistakes such as information dump and spelling mistakes that can be solved by the author after reading it thoroughly. Good luck and keep up the good work!
References to relate to:
https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/grammar/split-infinitives
https://www.prdaily.com/Main/Articles/24_complex_wordsand_their_simpler_alternatives_8750.aspx
http://www.really-learn-english.com/avoiding-weak-adjectives.html
Twin_Rogue Hello Rogue, I have just gone through your novel and finished reading all of the chapters. The title names are interesting as it makes me expect something every chapter which I am truly loving. Few issues have popped up such as capitalizing names or titles (Some words are confusing and when you explained them I finally got what you meant which is very bad because that will get readers lost during the reading process). Let us mention the three issues and references will be mentioned below:
I felt a bit dissatisfied with the spelling mistakes but I can see improvements in the first chapters, I hope that this will become better (following it). Good luck and keep up the good work!
Reference:
http://tutorforenglish.com/Courses/SentenceStructure/Show.aspx?Lesson=Pronoun_Antecedent_Agreement
https://carey.jhu.edu/uploads/files/Sentence_Fragments.pdf
Requesting for a review!
The Phoenix Hero.
Fantasy.
I think it has potential really, even though the setting might be a bit plain, I think I can fix that with the developing story and background. But somehow I feel there's something missing...
Appreciated!
MellowGuy I love the synopsis! Sadly you have several grammar errors in it. I would recommend reading your story out loud. This will help you catch wordy sentences and several other errors. If you get tongue tied when you try to read something out loud then you should revise it.
You stole your own thunder when you stated that something suddenly happened before it happened. Let the event happen then add in Suddenly “Luccas could only...” How you let things unfold can help change the tension your reader experiences.
A perfect example of letting your story unfold without spoiling it is:
“He froze.
A flying beast so big that you can actually ride …”
You also have quite the info dump and wall of text at the end of your chapter. The first chapter should be your hook. It will be the last stop before your reader decides if they are fully committed to reading the story or are interested in something else. Personally, I find an info dump like this bad because I have a horrible ability to recall things. I made it to the end of your world history and had forgotten the beginning. I don’t want to forget these things, they are important. If you can slow down the pace when you give out information your reader has a better chance at recalling it.
Please keep writing your story! Hopefully this helps!
creativewritting Thank you for the review! Helped a lot! I was also confused about the information is too much for the readers in the first chapters, but I thought it would be better to have too many information than not having enough and getting confused why this or that happened... I tried to make the explanations as natural as I could so that the readers wouldn't feel like I'm just stuffing them with info... apparently, that backfired... Anyway, I'll try working on it, I was already planning to rewrite the chapters, so I've decided to divide the long explanations into several related occasions. The spoiling issue noted. The grammar, however... I try double checking the novel but I always end up with some mistakes, hopefully, I'll try working things out by reading more grammar books and articles or something... Again, thank you very much for the review!
Hiya there,
Any feedback would be extremely useful
Name: The Rise (Realistic Fiction - Political Drama)
Synopsis: Despite being the son of two of the most powerful politicians in the country, Leon never cared greatly for politics. Until his father is suddenly arrested midway through his campaign. Leon, acting out with revenge and worry, finds himself in the middle of one of the greatest political rivalries in history.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10669595306096005/The-Rise
Thank you
Hello to yous, I would just like some feedback towards my first novel, yous have my thanks.
Both good and bad reviews are accepted as I want to improve whilst writing this first novel of mine.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/10690615405128905/Apex-System
Synopsis
Hailed as a once in a millennium genius, Tian Long was deceived and betrayed, eventually losing everything, including his life.
However, Legends never die!
Armed with a system he obtained, reaching the Apex is but a matter of time.
Follow the story of a legend as he carves an everlasting glory!
The updates are 1 chapter a day or more.
King_of_Crowns I loved it! Your synopsis was good! You pulled me into the story and held me through the end of the first chapter! I’m definitely going to have to read more! Kepp it up!
creativewritting Thank you so much :smile_cat:
NeverLost I like your synopsis! It’s short, descriptive, and sweet. In contrast your second sentence was really long. If you run your story though slick write it can give you some stats on sentence length to help you identify when one might be too long. Also, be careful about caveating things in your writing it can detract from what you just said. (You are not alone in having to watch out for this.)
I liked how you gave the chase scene then backtracked after using a line to explain more. On the other hand you may have given too detailed of a synopsis on your protagonist's history. You can let some of this slip out as your story progresses. If you dull these things out in smaller bits they will be like a very sweet treat something you can really only enjoy to its fullest when given in small portions.
You accidentally stole your own thunder or in this case explosive moment by given a suddenly before you gave your sound effects. It was okay this time, but watch out for such events in the future these moments are key to increasing the tension your reader. You may still be able to improve this one, but I’m not sure how.
Your story seems interesting and you definitely pulled me in at a lot of points. Just keep working on it and you'll get there!
It will be my first time editing official novels but I could and would like to lend a hand... 
