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Hiya there,
Any feedback would be extremely useful
Name: The Rise (Realistic Fiction - Political Drama)
Synopsis: Despite being the son of two of the most powerful politicians in the country, Leon never cared greatly for politics. Until his father is suddenly arrested midway through his campaign. Leon, acting out with revenge and worry, finds himself in the middle of one of the greatest political rivalries in history.
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10669595306096005/The-Rise
Thank you

King_of_Crowns I loved it! Your synopsis was good! You pulled me into the story and held me through the end of the first chapter! I’m definitely going to have to read more! Kepp it up!

creativewritting Thank you so much :smile_cat:

Hello! I would like to request for a review as well.

Title: Codename: Phoenix
Link:https://m.webnovel.com/book/10635950706083405?keyword=&source=auto
Genre:Romance Fiction
Update Frequency: one chapter a day ( but sometimes two or three when I received decent amounts of power stones hehe)

As the author, I think the story has a good plot but I believe that there are still things to improve to attract more readers.

Thanks in advance!

Hello,

I'd love to have a review on my fiction as well!

https://www.webnovel.com/book/10491892106047905/Jupiter's-Rising

Title: Jupiter's Rising
Genre: Fantasy, magic, some game elements.

Focus is mainly on character going on an adventure from a sedentary life but I noticed that character development is quite the challenge while progressing the story in a fun a natural way.
I also want to mention I already realized that my whole beginning seems to be a stretched to about 31 chapters before any real action ensues....

I update 2 chapters every other day usually, and have a lot to work towards to make my novel fun and "light"

Thank you for taking the time!

Hello! I would like a review for my novel as well.

https://m.webnovel.com/book/10746867606154605
Genre: Fantasy/Genderbender

I have troubles in writing since I usually draw manga, where I don't have to use a lot of adjectives and long sentences. So I want some advice on what should and shouldn't be there. I also have doubts on my grammar so please give me some tips on that as well. Thank you!

basabookk I like your synopsis and Cover! Your story is great and pulled me right along with it! The only problem I found was the occasional grammatical and tense error. If you run your stuff through grammarly it will help fix some of these errors. You can also try carefully reading your story out loud several times. The mistakes I’ve seen are few so they’re harder catch on your own. Keep up the good work!

Link to the novel: https://www.webnovel.com/book/10483718405044005/He's-The-One%E2%84%A2
The genre of the novel: Fictional Romance
What do you think about it as an author: It's fast-paced but overall great. (It's my baby so of course, I would say that )
How common are the updates: The updates are slower since I write as a hobby while helping support my family so about 1 every other day.

Hello, I just saw this thread and thought it's amazing of what you guys are doing!
I'm currently writing two novels and would like to ask for a review for both. Is that okay?
For now though, I'll go ahead and just post the information for the one I'm most concerned for.

Link to the novel: 13 Clans of Gods vs The God of Void
The genre of the novel: Fantasy
What do you think about it as an author: What I'm mostly concerned about is the plot, grammar and writing style. As you can see, I write in 1st person, so I am worried that this is a big part of what isn't attracting readers (and the random updates). I have tried my best with editing the chapters, but when I go back over it, I tend to find even more mistakes. I'm really not good when it comes to editing. As the writer, of course, I have enjoyed the progress of the story and the characters. I especially like my male lead and can't wait to see him get stronger. Although, I still feel as if I'm missing something.
How common are the updates: 1-3 chapters a week. Updates, for now, are an issue for me. They are random and will continue to be so until June 4.

creativewritting Thank you for your kind words! I really appreciate your advise :)

creativewritting Thank you for your kind words! I really appreciate your advise :)

FlowingTime Hello Flowing time! I have just finished reading your first chapter and what can I say, it is great! The idea is well placed while your mindset towards placing those ideas are unique, the only issue I had was the spelling mistakes and small issues with the sentences which are unbalanced. Let me list the issues and find some ways to reference them for research purpose:

Issues [Chapter 1]

• Spelling (read last sentences)
• Sentence structure (Paragraph 2 and 5)

That is all I can find really, was a bit difficult but thankfully caught those 2 issues at chapter one because if no one mentioned them it would be a huge issue. Good luck and keep up the good work!

References:
https://study.com/academy/lesson/how-to-write-better-by-improving-your-sentence-structure.html
https://www.fluentu.com/blog/english/how-to-improve-english-spelling/

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CheezyMayo Hello~ After reading the first chapter I can see common issues spread out like a damn virus! Yet what caught me off-guard is how the story is being amazingly told to us which not only made me interested to read more but excited! Let us first talk about the major issues that have been found in the first chapter,

Issues

• Missing Article ("I could hear the faint sound of siren and a lot of noise coming from the streets and the people around me." the siren should have 'A' or 'The' before it)
• Split infinitive ("to just stop." should be "Just to stop")
• Faulty parallelism ("trickles" should be "trickled")
• Complex Wording ("a ladle" isn't that a damn spoon?! too complex)
• Tautological phrase ("Until that one fateful night, she caught him doing the deed with someone else on her own condo!" the word Own should be removed as it expresses the same information twice. Avoid using repetitive words when writing, especially in formal situations.)

This is the major issues I had found in your novel. Best way to fix this kind of issues are to read them out-loud, if you have issues with anything, avoid it and try to write simple words, simple text-lines and always remember your basics when writing that it is all me in the story and no one else!

Reference:
https://www.thoughtco.com/faulty-parallelism-grammar-1690788
https://literarydevices.net/tautology/
<Read document linked on the thread for more materials>

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IluvbloodNcookies Hello there~ I apologize that I can't discuss anything about this novel that is 'Amazing' or 'Great' as it isn't my best genre but I can point out mistakes that I have found while reading through :) Issues commonly seen are:

Issues

• Wrong article with set expression ("She stood at a height of 5'6". at a heigh of sounds wrong, best replacement should be "At the height of" These expressions are idiomatic, so they don’t follow a particular pattern.)
• Incorrect punctuations ("Her company, Crestfall Industries, was so successful and well-respected that models from the company were on high demand, thus Kaia decided to sign on and train three new models." before Thus should be a full-stop instead of a comma and There are three things you can do with two independent clauses. You can make them two separate sentences, join them with a semicolon, or join them with a comma and a coordinating conjunction.)
• The noun phrase triumphant gaze seems to be missing a determiner before it.

All references have been posted before, and please make sure to go through them if you found your issue in here, I would also recommend to check out the google document resource we have created which contains a bit on this information.

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Tsukiyoru Hello Neko~ Time to talk about the first issue on this novel, the synopsis, it could have been better for example "For a thousand years the war between the 13 major gods has been in a state of stalemate." Good sense of naming and structure within the novel rarely saw any issues in chapter 1 and it has been a great chapter to read! Sadly it is short, very short for a first chapter which will decide what the readers will do next. For the Issues as it is only 1 thing that I have noticed repeated more than 30 times in chapter 1, Overused Words!

Overused words are a pain to anyone including the author himself/ herself, words are repeated too often, there is no variety of words which will affect the novel quality and that is a very bad thing. Re-read your novel and this should help you out-loud and you will notice the mistakes you couldn't see before. I would also recommend getting someone to proofread your work, doing it alone is not as well as others doing it for you. Keep up the good work and good luck!

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