eudine
Of course I'm interested [eudine]. I'm open to read any kind of story; I just took a quick look at your story and I think it will take me a few hours to send you the review of the 8 chapters (however, I have just posted my thoughts from chapter 1, as a preliminary review of everything you have written about your work)., but you will have it within the day (or night depending your location in earth hehe). In the meantime, I'll leave the link to my story below:

https://www.webnovel.com/book/hero-from-a-distant-galaxy_26148543005199605

      Fitoxi Done! Just left a review and comments. I love your writing style and how intricately you described certain scenarios, it was fun to read!

          eudine
          I just saw your review, I'm so glad you liked the story 🙂; Thank you so much for your honest opinions. I enjoyed reading your novel too; I came across a lot of good surprises that I didn't expect while reading the first chapter 😃
          Have a nice day! 🙂

              I review your novel
              My honest review (based on 4 chapters):-

              1. You should work on grammar and at least read your chapter before publishing. (You sometimes misspelled the name of the character like zeek to deek or something)
              2. You should introduce your character's features so that readers can imagine them. (I read 4 chapters and I don't even know how MC looks)
              3. You should explain the scenes surrounding well.
              4. You are doing everything at a very fast pace. I know you want to get to the interesting part but don't destroy the story for it.

              What you can do better:-

              1. You can use Grammarly or some other writing tools. Read your chapter before publishing.
              2. You can describe some small features of the character like "Queen chandi, who has blond hair with golden eyes, looks like a fairy with white angle-like wings behind her back." It's a simple example.
              3. You can describe your surrounding like “Inside a palace, In the throne room, Queen chandi, who has blond hair with golden eyes, looks like a fairy with white angle-like wings behind her back. Sitting on a golden throne her majestic look can make anyone's head bow. In front of her, some distance away stand 2 persons, One woman who has…” something like that so that reader can imagine the things. You can write like this putting yourself in MC’s or other characters' perspectives. Don’t forget to end the scene with ***, … whatever you prefer these things also have some meaning like *** will end the scene and … will continue the same scene after some time as I have read hundreds of novels I came to know that fact.
              4. You can maintain the pace like you can finish the other scene fast but you should keep a slow pace while developing important characters. You can give time to show a good relationship between MC and her lover then you should kill her lover so that reader can sympathize with her and understand her feeling. You just show that they love each other and show them hugging. (I never read a love story so I don’t know much about it).

              What you can do extra:

              1. Try to write a novel from different Characters and MC’s perspectives. That will help readers to connect with MC more and help them to understand important characters feeling.
              2. Take some time to develop a world a little. I as a reader read at least 10 chapters before dropping it and I am very picky so I think most people read at least 10 chapters so you have time to describe important details and make your novel interesting. As a reader, I can confirm that better world-building makes readers read more.
              3. Don’t use difficult names. our novels will be read by people globally so use common names. I will be honest I don’t know how to pronounce the MC’s name (Genève).

              I took my time to write this review. I hope this will not only help you but also others. I am not a professional writer but I know a thing or two by reading hundreds of novels. If you find any problem in my way of writing you can feed back me as well.
              https://www.webnovel.com/book/darkened-nexus_26040773805802005

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                from_another_world

                Hey, I really appreciate you taking the time to write this. You offer some excellent advice. Want to hear the funny part? I actually did use Grammarly, and hired a professional editor before I published the novel on Amazon. After I published, I kept getting the same feedback. 1. The first chapter didn't hold the reader's attention (too many details, not enough action). 2. The reader wanted to know more about the characters and their background. So I took the book down, and chopped the first chapter in half(removing character descriptions inadvertently) and added more information about characters and more dialogue scenes that highlighted personality. I must have completely forgotten to edit, and that is especially important for me to do... I make a lot of mistakes. Thank you for reminding me. I will definitely go back and do that.

                Now, when you say write from multiple characters perspectives are you saying I should switch it to first person narration and write from each characters point of view? I actually go back to both of the first two worlds and build them better. Did you make it to when Geneve took over the town? I started really building her new world there. You think its too late or not enough details ? Did you make it to Alizeh and her world, Platonia? If so, was the world building and character description lacking there too? Also, Would it help at all if I make the first chapter a prologue?

                      Title: Fairy Tales of Fantastical Realms: Darkness Before Dawn
                      Update: At least one chapter daily.

                      Hello guys! I would appreciate it if you drop by to read my book. Feel free to comment. I do not mind harsh criticism, as it can help me get better! Thank you!
                      Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/fairy-tales-of-fantastical-realms-darkness-before-dawn_26315393206968405

                      Synopsis:
                      In the enchanting land of Butterhame, a veil of darkness threatens to consume the once-peaceful realm. Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora, three siblings bound by love and destiny, find themselves thrust into the heart of an ancient conflict that will test the limits of their courage and the strength of their bonds.

                      When the Fiora household comes under siege from sinister forces, the siblings must embark on a perilous journey to unravel the mysteries surrounding their family's legacy and uncover the truth about their enigmatic parents. As they navigate a world filled with magic, deception, and danger, Max, Agnes, and Illyanna must rely on their unique talents and each other to survive.

                      Guided by the wisdom of their loyal guardian, Matterinna, the siblings discover the power that lies within themselves and learn the true meaning of family, love, and sacrifice. But as the shadows of the past begin to encroach upon their lives, they must confront their own inner demons, even as they struggle to save their beloved homeland from the forces of darkness that seek to destroy it.

                      FIORA: DARKNESS BEFORE DAWN is a captivating tale of adventure, redemption, and the unbreakable bonds of family. Set in a richly imagined fantasy world, this epic saga follows Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora as they navigate the treacherous landscape of their destiny, seeking to protect all that they hold dear from the insidious darkness that threatens to consume them. Will the siblings prevail in their quest to save their world and preserve their family legacy, or will they succumb to the shadows that lurk within and without? Only time will tell, as the whispers of fate guide them on their harrowing journey.

                        Title: Fairy Tales of Fantastical Realms: Darkness Before Dawn
                        Update: At least one chapter daily.

                        Hello guys! I would appreciate it if you drop by to read my book. Feel free to comment. I do not mind harsh criticism, as it can help me get better! Thank you!
                        Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/fairy-tales-of-fantastical-realms-darkness-before-dawn_26315393206968405

                        Synopsis:
                        In the enchanting land of Butterhame, a veil of darkness threatens to consume the once-peaceful realm. Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora, three siblings bound by love and destiny, find themselves thrust into the heart of an ancient conflict that will test the limits of their courage and the strength of their bonds.

                        When the Fiora household comes under siege from sinister forces, the siblings must embark on a perilous journey to unravel the mysteries surrounding their family's legacy and uncover the truth about their enigmatic parents. As they navigate a world filled with magic, deception, and danger, Max, Agnes, and Illyanna must rely on their unique talents and each other to survive.

                        Guided by the wisdom of their loyal guardian, Matterinna, the siblings discover the power that lies within themselves and learn the true meaning of family, love, and sacrifice. But as the shadows of the past begin to encroach upon their lives, they must confront their own inner demons, even as they struggle to save their beloved homeland from the forces of darkness that seek to destroy it.

                        FIORA: DARKNESS BEFORE DAWN is a captivating tale of adventure, redemption, and the unbreakable bonds of family. Set in a richly imagined fantasy world, this epic saga follows Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora as they navigate the treacherous landscape of their destiny, seeking to protect all that they hold dear from the insidious darkness that threatens to consume them. Will the siblings prevail in their quest to save their world and preserve their family legacy, or will they succumb to the shadows that lurk within and without? Only time will tell, as the whispers of fate guide them on their harrowing journey.

                          NinaChroni
                          I only read 4 chapters because I hate love stories.
                          I don't have time for now exams are dancing over my head. So I will say just this: you have a lot to work on in your novel seriously I tried very hard to understand your novel just to write comments.
                          When I say perspective I don't mean like every important character. I mean only characters affected by that scene. If you want to understand what I am talking about I recommend you to read the latest 5 chapters of my novel.

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