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Hey, I really appreciate you taking the time to write this. You offer some excellent advice. Want to hear the funny part? I actually did use Grammarly, and hired a professional editor before I published the novel on Amazon. After I published, I kept getting the same feedback. 1. The first chapter didn't hold the reader's attention (too many details, not enough action). 2. The reader wanted to know more about the characters and their background. So I took the book down, and chopped the first chapter in half(removing character descriptions inadvertently) and added more information about characters and more dialogue scenes that highlighted personality. I must have completely forgotten to edit, and that is especially important for me to do... I make a lot of mistakes. Thank you for reminding me. I will definitely go back and do that.

Now, when you say write from multiple characters perspectives are you saying I should switch it to first person narration and write from each characters point of view? I actually go back to both of the first two worlds and build them better. Did you make it to when Geneve took over the town? I started really building her new world there. You think its too late or not enough details ? Did you make it to Alizeh and her world, Platonia? If so, was the world building and character description lacking there too? Also, Would it help at all if I make the first chapter a prologue?

        Title: Fairy Tales of Fantastical Realms: Darkness Before Dawn
        Update: At least one chapter daily.

        Hello guys! I would appreciate it if you drop by to read my book. Feel free to comment. I do not mind harsh criticism, as it can help me get better! Thank you!
        Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/fairy-tales-of-fantastical-realms-darkness-before-dawn_26315393206968405

        Synopsis:
        In the enchanting land of Butterhame, a veil of darkness threatens to consume the once-peaceful realm. Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora, three siblings bound by love and destiny, find themselves thrust into the heart of an ancient conflict that will test the limits of their courage and the strength of their bonds.

        When the Fiora household comes under siege from sinister forces, the siblings must embark on a perilous journey to unravel the mysteries surrounding their family's legacy and uncover the truth about their enigmatic parents. As they navigate a world filled with magic, deception, and danger, Max, Agnes, and Illyanna must rely on their unique talents and each other to survive.

        Guided by the wisdom of their loyal guardian, Matterinna, the siblings discover the power that lies within themselves and learn the true meaning of family, love, and sacrifice. But as the shadows of the past begin to encroach upon their lives, they must confront their own inner demons, even as they struggle to save their beloved homeland from the forces of darkness that seek to destroy it.

        FIORA: DARKNESS BEFORE DAWN is a captivating tale of adventure, redemption, and the unbreakable bonds of family. Set in a richly imagined fantasy world, this epic saga follows Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora as they navigate the treacherous landscape of their destiny, seeking to protect all that they hold dear from the insidious darkness that threatens to consume them. Will the siblings prevail in their quest to save their world and preserve their family legacy, or will they succumb to the shadows that lurk within and without? Only time will tell, as the whispers of fate guide them on their harrowing journey.

          Title: Fairy Tales of Fantastical Realms: Darkness Before Dawn
          Update: At least one chapter daily.

          Hello guys! I would appreciate it if you drop by to read my book. Feel free to comment. I do not mind harsh criticism, as it can help me get better! Thank you!
          Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/fairy-tales-of-fantastical-realms-darkness-before-dawn_26315393206968405

          Synopsis:
          In the enchanting land of Butterhame, a veil of darkness threatens to consume the once-peaceful realm. Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora, three siblings bound by love and destiny, find themselves thrust into the heart of an ancient conflict that will test the limits of their courage and the strength of their bonds.

          When the Fiora household comes under siege from sinister forces, the siblings must embark on a perilous journey to unravel the mysteries surrounding their family's legacy and uncover the truth about their enigmatic parents. As they navigate a world filled with magic, deception, and danger, Max, Agnes, and Illyanna must rely on their unique talents and each other to survive.

          Guided by the wisdom of their loyal guardian, Matterinna, the siblings discover the power that lies within themselves and learn the true meaning of family, love, and sacrifice. But as the shadows of the past begin to encroach upon their lives, they must confront their own inner demons, even as they struggle to save their beloved homeland from the forces of darkness that seek to destroy it.

          FIORA: DARKNESS BEFORE DAWN is a captivating tale of adventure, redemption, and the unbreakable bonds of family. Set in a richly imagined fantasy world, this epic saga follows Max, Agnes, and Illyanna Fiora as they navigate the treacherous landscape of their destiny, seeking to protect all that they hold dear from the insidious darkness that threatens to consume them. Will the siblings prevail in their quest to save their world and preserve their family legacy, or will they succumb to the shadows that lurk within and without? Only time will tell, as the whispers of fate guide them on their harrowing journey.

            NinaChroni
            I only read 4 chapters because I hate love stories.
            I don't have time for now exams are dancing over my head. So I will say just this: you have a lot to work on in your novel seriously I tried very hard to understand your novel just to write comments.
            When I say perspective I don't mean like every important character. I mean only characters affected by that scene. If you want to understand what I am talking about I recommend you to read the latest 5 chapters of my novel.

                BoredwriterX06

                Hey I am not rushing you, I know that sometimes it's easy to lose track of who we've reviewed and who we haven't. I just wanted to check in and see if you were still planning on reviewing my book. I submitted my review 5 days ago.

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