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JA_Chrysant
Thanks for your efforts
Well, It's understandable. I think you haven't read many transmigration novels. I will work on this chapter to show 'How he transmigrated in another body'
Sorry for the inconvenience

Kamiru Thanks, can you please tell How should I mention you on my novel

NinaChroni
I only read 4 chapters because I hate love stories.
I don't have time for now exams are dancing over my head. So I will say just this: you have a lot to work on in your novel seriously I tried very hard to understand your novel just to write comments.
When I say perspective I don't mean like every important character. I mean only characters affected by that scene. If you want to understand what I am talking about I recommend you to read the latest 5 chapters of my novel.

My honest review (based on 4 chapters):-

1. You should work on grammar and at least read your chapter before publishing. (You sometimes misspelled the name of the character like zeek to deek or something)
2. You should introduce your character's features so that readers can imagine them. (I read 4 chapters and I don't even know how MC looks)
3. You should explain the scenes surrounding well.
4. You are doing everything at a very fast pace. I know you want to get to the interesting part but don't destroy the story for it.

What you can do better:-

1. You can use Grammarly or some other writing tools. Read your chapter before publishing.
2. You can describe some small features of the character like "Queen chandi, who has blond hair with golden eyes, looks like a fairy with white angle-like wings behind her back." It's a simple example.
3. You can describe your surrounding like “Inside a palace, In the throne room, Queen chandi, who has blond hair with golden eyes, looks like a fairy with white angle-like wings behind her back. Sitting on a golden throne her majestic look can make anyone's head bow. In front of her, some distance away stand 2 persons, One woman who has…” something like that so that reader can imagine the things. You can write like this putting yourself in MC’s or other characters' perspectives. Don’t forget to end the scene with ***, … whatever you prefer these things also have some meaning like *** will end the scene and … will continue the same scene after some time as I have read hundreds of novels I came to know that fact.
4. You can maintain the pace like you can finish the other scene fast but you should keep a slow pace while developing important characters. You can give time to show a good relationship between MC and her lover then you should kill her lover so that reader can sympathize with her and understand her feeling. You just show that they love each other and show them hugging. (I never read a love story so I don’t know much about it).

What you can do extra:

1. Try to write a novel from different Characters and MC’s perspectives. That will help readers to connect with MC more and help them to understand important characters feeling.
2. Take some time to develop a world a little. I as a reader read at least 10 chapters before dropping it and I am very picky so I think most people read at least 10 chapters so you have time to describe important details and make your novel interesting. As a reader, I can confirm that better world-building makes readers read more.
3. Don’t use difficult names. our novels will be read by people globally so use common names. I will be honest I don’t know how to pronounce the MC’s name (Genève).

I took my time to write this review. I hope this will not only help you but also others. I am not a professional writer but I know a thing or two by reading hundreds of novels. If you find any problem in my way of writing you can feed back me as well.
If you are an expert and find some problem in my review and suggestions. Please late me know so that we all new writes can learn from some experts.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/darkened-nexus_26040773805802005

I review your novel
My honest review (based on 4 chapters):-

1. You should work on grammar and at least read your chapter before publishing. (You sometimes misspelled the name of the character like zeek to deek or something)
2. You should introduce your character's features so that readers can imagine them. (I read 4 chapters and I don't even know how MC looks)
3. You should explain the scenes surrounding well.
4. You are doing everything at a very fast pace. I know you want to get to the interesting part but don't destroy the story for it.

What you can do better:-

1. You can use Grammarly or some other writing tools. Read your chapter before publishing.
2. You can describe some small features of the character like "Queen chandi, who has blond hair with golden eyes, looks like a fairy with white angle-like wings behind her back." It's a simple example.
3. You can describe your surrounding like “Inside a palace, In the throne room, Queen chandi, who has blond hair with golden eyes, looks like a fairy with white angle-like wings behind her back. Sitting on a golden throne her majestic look can make anyone's head bow. In front of her, some distance away stand 2 persons, One woman who has…” something like that so that reader can imagine the things. You can write like this putting yourself in MC’s or other characters' perspectives. Don’t forget to end the scene with ***, … whatever you prefer these things also have some meaning like *** will end the scene and … will continue the same scene after some time as I have read hundreds of novels I came to know that fact.
4. You can maintain the pace like you can finish the other scene fast but you should keep a slow pace while developing important characters. You can give time to show a good relationship between MC and her lover then you should kill her lover so that reader can sympathize with her and understand her feeling. You just show that they love each other and show them hugging. (I never read a love story so I don’t know much about it).

What you can do extra:

1. Try to write a novel from different Characters and MC’s perspectives. That will help readers to connect with MC more and help them to understand important characters feeling.
2. Take some time to develop a world a little. I as a reader read at least 10 chapters before dropping it and I am very picky so I think most people read at least 10 chapters so you have time to describe important details and make your novel interesting. As a reader, I can confirm that better world-building makes readers read more.
3. Don’t use difficult names. our novels will be read by people globally so use common names. I will be honest I don’t know how to pronounce the MC’s name (Genève).

I took my time to write this review. I hope this will not only help you but also others. I am not a professional writer but I know a thing or two by reading hundreds of novels. If you find any problem in my way of writing you can feed back me as well.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/darkened-nexus_26040773805802005