Hey all,
My first ever novel! It's about school life in a future society, where video games (Augmented Reality and Virtual Reality) have a really, really significant place in life. And what's a lighthearted novel without an overpowered MC, and a bit of contrast with the struggles of a society adapting to war?

Ads are getting smarting, I'm telling you :)

My book: WAR Breaker

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I hope that you enjoy. All feedback is greatly appreciated (be as brutally honest as you want).
Edit: Sorry for rambling on, but I'll try to get more chapters out. I'm too slow at editing.

MasterRabbink Thank you for the info! I really hope other authors are aware of this.

I'd like to announce that my original work Gaia Online was entered into the writing prompts contest number 3, two days ago. Please read on, or click on the cover to go to the book's dedicated page.

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Synopsis

In the future, mixed reality and advanced AI is everywhere. A new invention FuSe, promises to take virtual worlds to a new level: Total immersion. The device, however, has a fatal flow. It tends to kill its users.

Blake Wilson is one of many illegal test subjects. He and others must spend a year attached to FuSe, mainly in Gaia Online, a virtual reality MMORPG set in a medieval fantasy world.

Among the test subjects, some seek fame, some seek wealth, some seek adventure, some seek escape, and some even seek visceral violence. Blake seeks none of that. Blake is a broken man who seeks salvation, either in life, or in death.

It turns out, not everything is what it seems. Gaia Online has two faces, and there are fates much worse than a broken man.

      VastoGrim Lol. There is a 'Nigerian Prince' who need help, he made a link above my post, but a mod had delete the link above me, therefore an accidental victim appeared.

      dapenggaofei Can you remove my post above? An accidental victim happened. @dapenggaofei

      I think your pickle slayer hurt me... Please give me some enter sword to slash it. :P

      On a serious note, I think you need to break the sentences using dot '.' instead of ','. Also use the Enter weapon to cut those paragraph.

      I don't think I could see the plot line since it was just 1 chapter at this time. It seems you will add some comedy/absurdity in it. Ganbare.

            MasterRabbink Second chapter already released, tried taken into account your advices, I look forward to your thoughts on it.

                Anone There is someone who write a link to outside 'scam' sites. Our mod had delete it.

                Who else would give a dangerous link to outside site other than the generous 'Nigerian Prince' who need someone to help him transfer some money to overseas but you have to pay some 'transaction fee' first for him?

                (You haven't ever got the 'Nigerian Prince' email? He said he was Nigerian, but if you could trace it would appear in other country. Lol.)

                Try to search Nigerian Prince Meme on Google!

                    The Steel Throne
                    https://www.webnovel.com/book/11326209406328405/The-Steel-Throne

                    Synopsis:
                    An Arch God reincarnated (he is the main hero from 1st contest entry, also reincarnated to a cinderella in the second entry, this time the third reincarnation.) into a body of a professional eSport MOBA player.

                    Short Novel. Only 4-5 Chapters Planed. No MOBA Knowledge required. This novel is completed without the need to read the main reincarnation novel.

                    High Usage of CURSES. You have been warned. Kids should not read.

                    To read past reincarnation: Endless Universes - Phoenix Rebirth Path - The 4325th
                    https://www.webnovel.com/book/11181310806281605

                    To read his second reincarnation as a Cinderella. Gwahahaha. (Different Ending than the above novel).
                    Cinderella Idol (Completed Novel) - https://www.webnovel.com/book/11258420506307005/

                    This is to promote my main novel:
                    Endless Universes - Young Master Path - The 1368th
                    https://www.webnovel.com/book/10935403706210205

                      MasterRabbink wow, my country has been given a bad name. We gave princes, but they're not as mainstream as like maybe the royal family of England. We don't even care about royalty.
                      Shame on those guys, shame I say.
                      I feel embarrassed, but that's just the choice made by a few, even if we're killing ourselves, we're more than just scammers. On behalf of my people I apologize for the bad eggs. Please don't judge us based on the actions of a few useless jackasses. Thanks😊😊😊😊😊

                          SweetsTomato there are many kingdoms in Nigeria. Some of them even extinct.
                          Prime example would be the current Benin kingdom, or the forgotten Nok tribe with their terracotta sculptures. Or my own tribe, the Igala people, who I'm proud to say once ruled the entire southern basin of my country. But now we're almost forgotten.

                            Anone Most the scammer is not Nigerian. Lol. Usually they were in the country with high cyber crime. Including My Country. Gwahahaha.

                                I guess I'll give this contest a try. Novel name - Invasion Wars
                                https://www.webnovel.com/book/11329752506329805/Invasion-Wars

                                Synopsis:
                                In an era where only games and gamers matters, a hardcore gamer Light Gun, finally manages to borrow the most popular game in the world from a friend. Skipping class to visit the simulation room where advance games and virtual reality comes to life, Gun just installs the game and the whole world changes with it. Why was he in a room with people?

                                "Welcome to Invasion Wars where the weak is prey and the strong is predators. Have fun invading and don't forget this hint, never let the prey go. Bye! Bye!"

                                  MasterRabbink wow. I can’t believe people actually fell for it. I'm Nigerian, but I've never seen a prince in my twenty years of life. Nigerian prince their mother, humph

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