cBLaISrLIFEma How come I feel you reviewed my book without reading the first chapter What should I do? Should I review your book nonetheless or give a generic review like your reviews ? Either fine, but I really prefer an actual review rather than a good mark to artificially boost the review average.
captiun
- Aug 7, 2021
- Joined Apr 4, 2021
Campoccino Reviewed ! It was a good read. Your writing quality is really top notch. The plot is interesting and believable. Good job !
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Nr_Yet1208 Thanks for the reply! It's good to know. No wonder your writing quality is perfect. Kudos!
YueYe Done! Check my review. In a nutshell, I love the character design and the writing quality.
Here are some thoughts for possible improvements, up to you:- In Chapter 1+2, we learn Ji Rongxue's previous life was horrible and full of hardship, but it's not very detailed. To add more drama to it, why not tell more of her hardships? This will allow to develop further the character and give it a very strong will to live. Here's a book with a dramatic entrance, where the male lead dies and starts all over https://www.wuxiaworld.com/novel/the-second-coming-of-gluttony/scog-chapter-1
I was also curious: what was Ji Rongxue's good at in her previous life ? How did she live ?
The chapter 1 has a lot of dialogs as you explain the whole story of the book. I suggest to reduce it to make the first chapter more dynamic by telling less in the first chapter, but more in the next chapter. I would have loved a dialog in the first chapter, as the entire chapter was mostly made of only descriptions.
However, regarding the descriptions, they're well made!
- Chapter 3 +4 : the story seems to turn into a "slice of life". I am not sure whether there is a clear and strong motive for the main character. Is it just to live and enjoy life ? Perhaps "vengeance" or "becoming the #1" would be more interesting; (that's my personal preference, I'm not a big fan of slice of life novels).
Overall, it's very good! I'm probably not the right target for it, but no doubt other readers will love it more than I did. Kudos!
YueYe Sounds promising and entertaining. I'd like to review your first few chapters. I'm writing a slow-paced sci-fi with elements of mystery. Are you willing to review-swap (https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-string-age_19760950905162805) ?
Campoccino Cool synopsis! I'll review your first few chapters tonight Western European Time (here's my book: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-string-age_19760950905162805)
Nr_Yet1208 By the way, just wondering, how long do you take to write 2000 words? I find myself taking between 2 and 3 hours for a chapter of an average length of 2300 words, and I then need 45min of focused proofreading to clear most of the mistakes since I am not a native English speaker. After I write a dozen chapters, I spend yet more time, maybe 15min per chapter, to come back and fix minor plot incongruencies.
In total, I must spend 3 hours per chapter of slightly more than 2000 words. Is that a lot?
Nr_Yet1208 Done ! I left you the best review I've left on web novel, I think. But know that I really mean it. You deserve it ! However, I was unable to find any problem with your writing....sorry. i guess your command of English and writing skill are too much above mine for me to spot improvement areas. Anyway, keep up the good work, but make sure you have decent sleep and rest ! Judging by the rate of release, I'm actually worried haha
Nr_Yet1208 Will look into it tonight ;)
Nr_Yet1208 Thanks a lot! I owe you your time. What would you like me to do specifically for you?
Feeling all the stories are the same?
Feel ya. I've been reading web novels for 4 years and really, many plots are already explored. Personally, I read to draw myself into another universe, so after a while, I decided to write my own story, heavily based on my background as a physicist. I would recommend it to you ONLY if you like slow-building tension. If you are interested in physics, then I strongly recommend the book to you. In any case, I have never seen a plot remotely close to it.It's called "The String Age."
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For : Sci-fi/science/realistic fantasy lovers:
Pace: Slow
Word Building: Detailled
Characters: Several (4 main characters, bound by friendship)
Realism: Extreme, magic is explained by physicsLink : https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-string-age_19760950905162805
Synopis : Wants realistic fantasy powered by science? This is for you.
In the 21th century, our whole world was based on technologies that we used to operate our daily life.
Phones, internet, cars, electricity, wheels...were all based on principles of physics that had been unchanged and studied since ancient time.We were wrong.
As our world changes forever and learns to manipulate a new kind of energy, follow the adventure and meteoric rise of four teenagers. With no power except their friendship to help them, they must brave one challenge after another to survive an increasingly dangerous world.
Nr_Yet1208 Kindly requesting an honest review for my book, bad if it should, when you have the time. I went through your first chapter <Dawn- An age of Darkness > and liked it. Would you like me to review your book overall or specific items? My book: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-string-age_19760950905162805
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meixiaolian Review done! A very unique concept. Great imagination you have there! Keep going!
Jigx Reviewed! I like the setting and the characters. The leveling up is also well-designed. There's little doubt you write as you see things happening in your mind, which is good! It's creative. Now, however, if you ask me what you can improve, I'd say that the most notable thing is grammar. However, other reviewers have told you already, so I won't insist. Just try to edit with an advance tense/grammar checker or even request help from someone else. With that fixed, it'll really be good! Kudos!
meixiaolian Will review tonight, thank you ;)
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Jigx I will, your book is my genre. I will read through your chapters tonight (Western European time). Here's my book: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-string-age_19760950905162805