Title: The Reincarnated Vampire Wants to Say "Hi"
Genre: Fantasy, Isekai
However, there are reasons for that. The secrets behind his existence can--
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- Joined Dec 4, 2020
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Thanks, man, for pointing out my flaws that I'm unaware of! You're right, I should cut and simplify the descriptions. About the vocabulary, well, forgive me. I only use the words I'm familiar with.
I do have an outline until the end, but I still need to know how to deliver and connect them well.
About that dream, it can be an indication of future events, but not exactly this dream should be happening. It can be another way around or can be a lie. About MC's friend… well, I can't spoil her. Way too far for the storyline. I can't just state a single line in the 2nd chapter that this should be happening in the future. The two demon ladies should be a hint that something was going on or perhaps that random explosion on the planet's south pole. Maybe, I lack sentences about these things. I'll work this out.
Also same goes for the dragon, I can't state who exactly she is nor her history, that would be an info dump(I think). I wanted to this character full of questions like, "Who is she? Is she a dark lord in disguise? Maybe, she works in the maid cafe? What's her deal? Why is she teasing the MC?" Still, I need a craft and practice to deliver this well.
As for the MC… let's make him ordinary for a moment.
Once again, thanks, man! This is what I want to hear from others' opinions whether what I write is "ok" or not. Just as I promised, I'll pay you with powerstones
.Tara magkape tayo kahit mainit!
Can I have it as well? Recently, I rewrote mine because some readers were confused/had no idea what was going on... and that was a bad sign. I thought it was better to redo it while it was still early. I just wanted to know if I removed that or at least, minimized it.
But I can't do some detailed reviews...
, so maybe... 7-day PS as a payment? Maybe, even two weeks.Title: The Reincarnated Vampire Wants to Say "Hi"
Genre: Fantasy, Isekai
Synopsis: His friend kills him, then he reincarnates to another world, or the familiar phrase, "I got isekai'd". After the crisis, he finds out he's now a vampire bishoujo, a cute girl, but he doesn't have that hole... hmm, that "hole".
However, there are reasons for that. The secrets behind his existence can—
"So, you want to know why we're sexless beings? Instead, question me, all of us, including you; what are the origins of our existence? Who are we?"
The cover photo is not mine. Credits to the artist.
Source: Pinterest - Warfarin, Arknights."I'm not a murderer nor a robber... but a sinner."
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