Definitely Not Yue-bot: April 2021-Review Swap here!
Bunny_Junnie Sure! Again, here's my link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-school-for-the-unimpressive_19777653505214405
YueYe Done! Check my review. In a nutshell, I love the character design and the writing quality.
Here are some thoughts for possible improvements, up to you:
- In Chapter 1+2, we learn Ji Rongxue's previous life was horrible and full of hardship, but it's not very detailed. To add more drama to it, why not tell more of her hardships? This will allow to develop further the character and give it a very strong will to live. Here's a book with a dramatic entrance, where the male lead dies and starts all over https://www.wuxiaworld.com/novel/the-second-coming-of-gluttony/scog-chapter-1
I was also curious: what was Ji Rongxue's good at in her previous life ? How did she live ?
The chapter 1 has a lot of dialogs as you explain the whole story of the book. I suggest to reduce it to make the first chapter more dynamic by telling less in the first chapter, but more in the next chapter. I would have loved a dialog in the first chapter, as the entire chapter was mostly made of only descriptions.
However, regarding the descriptions, they're well made!
- Chapter 3 +4 : the story seems to turn into a "slice of life". I am not sure whether there is a clear and strong motive for the main character. Is it just to live and enjoy life ? Perhaps "vengeance" or "becoming the #1" would be more interesting; (that's my personal preference, I'm not a big fan of slice of life novels).
Overall, it's very good! I'm probably not the right target for it, but no doubt other readers will love it more than I did. Kudos!
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Nr_Yet1208 Thanks for the reply! It's good to know. No wonder your writing quality is perfect. Kudos!
BlaccLotus ofc...
BlaccLotus btw if I may ask something why people are liking cuffs and color more than cuffs and whips? It is driving me crazy... C&C is just a simple story of a bar girl falling in love with a narcissist costumer whereas C&W is on another level, a s/m loving college girl reducing herself as a slave of a rich man for satisfaction. C&W is sucking my whole imagination and experience for writing it. I thought readers will like this one more.
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Campoccino Reviewed ! It was a good read. Your writing quality is really top notch. The plot is interesting and believable. Good job !
David_Neilsen If it's not difficult for you, take the time to review my work. System, Adventure, Magic. https://www.webnovel.com/book/galaxy-duel-system_19647347106977005
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Andrew_Oak sure thing! Thanks for the review
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Bunny_Junnie Dropped a review, dear. It's under the name Megana4. I'll be expecting a review soon from you.
Here's my link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/a-possessive-mafia-leader_19322680206146505
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Hello, Anyone up for a review swap? Here's my link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/a-possessive-mafia-leader_19322680206146505
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