TheAdventurer
Assassination System: reading status: chapter 10
Woah now this was a change. This is the top 25 original novel and what can I say it definitely deserves the spot. It is your typical system novel with a quality only slightly below that of Webnovels contracted works. On the other side this makes pointing out general flaws pretty hard for me, because they are more in the detail. Following that, I know this review is not going to help the author improve as much, as it could help others (or at least I hope my reviews did lol). Because of that, I would offer the author the service of going over around 4 specific chapters and edit/comment them, so I can actually help him. If you are interested in that contact me personally on the discord channel please.
With that out of the way let’s get started with my review. The good points of this novel are the writing style, which is starting to make readers actually feel the story that is told a bit. Plot wise, there is a well-done problem and direction given to the MC, the character of your novel are a bit more than only shallow extras to the plot, and the world building can compare with your average cultivation world.
On the negative side of things I can say that you are very inconsistent. Some parts are done extremely well and others are not exactly bad, but not good either.
First of your writing style is mostly beyond just the fundamentals, but you still have a problem of expressing exactly and clear what you mean at some times. Many times your mode of expression only gives a shrouded idea of what you mean to your readers.
Negative things within the plot aspect are first of all your characters. Although they are more than only slaves to the plot, their character can still be done more through-out and in-depth.
Secondly the clichés are also strong in your novel. Although they don’t dictate it, they are still not given an overly unique twist.
Thirdly the Plot armour is strong in your novel. The System is extremely overpowered since the beginning, with a way to scary potential to grow. Even though everybody likes overpowered Characters, which go through life at ease, there is a border that limits the fun factor of reading a novel. And I am sorry to break it to you, but you are near that border. To give you an example for this:
“ [MC being deadly wounded and has only 5 more minutes before he dies, I think] Focusing his gaze, Dan scanned the area around him, particularly near the tree roots, and there, a tree about five meters away from him, a Blood Coagulating Grass [Medicine that can make him survive] calmly swayed along with the air.” – At least don’t make it five meters come on…
And lastly although your novel is realistic enough, for readers to get absorbed in it, you still have some minor paradoxes within. Examples for this are the way he handles his wound, a crossbow arrow that can nearly behead someone, the reason why he stepped into that forest that night in the first place (btw if you say analysing the plants, I am going to ask myself, how he knew exactly what plants that can help him survive are growing in that forest) or that he knows exactly what to order at a food stall he never been before.
Over all this is a solidly good read for people searching for a System novel.
