The_Drunkencrater Heres my review from reading up to chapter 10,
Has a interesting and unique premise, the first person perspective is a bit unconventional but can work, its a bit to lighthearted for my liking but thats personal preference. Action is a little bit dissapointing it doesn't have much detail or depth to the actions, the character's thoughts and motivations are very well written, solid grammar has some good moments of humor. I think it has potential to grow but just needs lots of improvement and eventually you'll get there.
I think currently from the first 10 chapters I would rate it, 3.5 stars out of 5
P.S : dont forget to read the latest 10 chapters of mine, please, preferably from my One Night Arc, chapter 43