B_l_a_n_k_2167

Allen_Clay012

Review Swap, can you guys read the the last 10 or so chapters starting from my OneNight Arc? I have quite a few chapters and want to understand how my writing is progressing. I'll read the same amount of chapters as you guys do though, preferably leave some comments if you guys see any mistakes, drop your links in response
[https://www.webnovel.com/book/we-die-young_25589107805343505](https://)

    B_l_a_n_k_2167 yo I read it and left some comments. I don't want to rate your novel low so here's my review

    Well written, nothing particularly wrong but doesn't hook my interest in any particular way, it feels like the author is just describing the scene in an elegant way while sometimes neglecting the tone of a scene or the emotions a character should be feeling in the moment, I like the story premise, with a near apathetic Main Character, but I recommend the author to read or perhaps watch examples like Grand Admiral Thrawn who while apathetic creates an atmosphere of intimidation while not being. a bad guy outright while not being a good guy, sort of a neutral chaos which i think your aiming for with Marshall,

    drop an honest review of my newest three chapters please,

      5 days later

      B_l_a_n_k_2167 I apologize if my review took so long. I will review your work once I am done catching up with my updates.

        The_Drunkencrater Heres my review from reading up to chapter 10,

        Has a interesting and unique premise, the first person perspective is a bit unconventional but can work, its a bit to lighthearted for my liking but thats personal preference. Action is a little bit dissapointing it doesn't have much detail or depth to the actions, the character's thoughts and motivations are very well written, solid grammar has some good moments of humor. I think it has potential to grow but just needs lots of improvement and eventually you'll get there.

        I think currently from the first 10 chapters I would rate it, 3.5 stars out of 5

        P.S : dont forget to read the latest 10 chapters of mine, please, preferably from my One Night Arc, chapter 43

          ForerunnerOfSky Read the arc till ch 50 smthng. The story flows and feels like a hollywood movie or something. Very American... That's for sure. I like it though, it's very relaxing? Serious? Something I would read to relax and be entertained? I'm not sure how to describe how I feel about it. It's a good story, but it's not my cup of tea. I'm more inclined towards eastern stories, as they tend to be more exaggerated(flashy) and quick towards the the ending of an arc(less detailed). Personally, I do not like the parts in your story that I might forget after forty chaps. Feels unnecessarily complex and a waste of time for readers that are excited for the outcome of an arc. That's just my preference. If I read to relax though and not to overload my mind with continuous and evergrowing arcs that I get addicted to, then this is at least a 7 out of 10!

            B_l_a_n_k_2167 Thank you for patiently waiting and I apologize for my late review. I enjoyed your story and it is very interesting. I added it to my library.

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