Luna1777 I already started reading a bit, and will still continue until at least somewhere around chapter 30 or so, if your story can keep me interested after that I will obviously read more and gradually make adjustments to my review. But please read the current version, especially the second half as it is very important and could prevent eventual problems. In that line, try reading your own story from the start from the position of a reader and not the author, it could be very helpfull. Oh, and maybe delete the "(edited)" tags from your chapternames, makes the whole thing look more beautifull LOL