Chryiss Now that's just messing with you. I'm sorry but I can't help but crack up laughing. :laughing: So comical.

Okay. I continue to lurk like deer.

      Veronica8 LMAO it’s okay! 😂 It was funny esp since that post was right after I posted my message about not reading the rules.

          Chryiss Pitying your condition much 😂😂😂!!! I think WN should have spammer badge soon!!! I think people will stop being annoying and shameful, once getting such a type of badge!!!

              Hi, I appreciate if you can spare time to read any of the chapter of the first novel I wrote. As a first time writer, I have many ideas, yet the story itself evolves itself as I write.

              The current chapter of Across Different Lifetimes and Realms to Find You is about 70+ with word count of more than 100k.

              I do hope for reviews about the story

              A short synopsis:
              An abandoned young sprite not only found out she has a powerful family, missing mother, unknown father, but also within herself is a secret mystery that another immortal has protected herself from knowing.

              When she ascended to Heavens, one of things she wanted was to make powerful friends, but unknowingly many strong players in the immortal and mortal world are attracted to this girl when she accidentally entered the mortal realm as an unregistered mortal.

              Slowly she will learn the weakness of humanity, love, and later on about herself. Is she ready for it and what does it mean when she recover all her memories and powers? What about her soul mate and her destined lover? Will they lose each other after all these different lifetimes?

              Please find link
              https://m.webnovel.com/book/15739642805797805

                Chryiss
                I am so glad that I stumbled upon this!! :) I am a new author on Webnovel and want some serious, actual and honest thoughts on it.
                Read if you see it
                Add if you like it
                Vote if you want it
                Review if you get it
                Novel: Smelling Secrets
                Author: @Ashley_Babe
                Synopsis:
                Jiya Dey has a secret gift, i.e., she can smell secrets! But, she rather prefers a normal life, without using her gift too much. That is until she stumbles upon a horrible secret which leads to her 'true' awakening and her acceptance into the INSTITUTE OF SMELLCRAFT AND SNIFFING!

                Follow her journey of self-discovery as she saves her 'native' world with a shapeshifting 'pet' and her bunch of new friends!

                I would be really grateful if you take a look at this and give some serious, actual and honest review!

                Looking forward to it!

                    @Overlord_Venus I decided not to review your story in the meantime as I wouldn’t have much to offer in terms of advice. I don’t like to direct how to go about writing a story unless it’s critical since I support a author’s creativity. Instead, I’ll just be enjoying your story as a reader and eventually review when I read more or all of your story, much like what I’ll do with @Veronica8 ‘s story. And this decision is also for the sake of getting through the stories posted on here.

                    FennecYeou Reviewed. For fairness and speed of getting to everyone on this list, I’m not going to look at more than one novel. So I arbitrarily just read the first book link.

                        Fourth Book: Two-Faced Duchess

                        Writing, Story, Character, World: All Average
                        Update Stability: Above Average

                        This is a review up to chapter 6.

                        First person narrative is a common choice for new writers, and oftentimes in my findings, a story in first person falls flat when third person would’ve been better. In the case of this one, it can go either way. The strength of the first person narrative in this wasn’t great, but it was neither bad. I do get a clear sense of the speaker’s character with a satisfactory demonstration of her inner thoughts and feelings. This is good, but the MC’s voice is still a little weak (this is different from a MC being a strong female lead aka her personality, but rather the compelling distinction of conveying that personality).

                        From chapter one, we see a glimpse into her former life as a setup for her eventual transmigration in chapter two as the duchess. Perhaps this could be considered a more drastic opinion, but I believe the entire first chapter could be cut without loosing anything substantial. Considering that her best friend and past life weren’t really mentioned again in any important way, and her personality is grasped well enough in the following chapters, the first chapter is unnecessary.

                        In fact, I’d argue it detracts from the story. For whatever reason, I find the MC more annoying in the first chapter than the next ones. This might be due to her screaming in CAPS which something I never suggest for any writer to do frequently. Caps should be used as an accent for the most dramatic situations and not just used as general shouting.

                        Her personality for the rest of the next chapters after the first, my only critique is that her mood and thoughts fluctuate sporadically, almost as if for comedic or dramatic relief rather than a grounded representation of her character and possibly of what a real human person would be like. I believe this is in part due to the weak voice of first person narrative. These two are intrinsically tied. A good first person narrative will often equal a compelling main character. (Addition not on original review. I thought about it a tad more, and another reason could be due to too many exclamations and question marks used in the 1st person narrative.)

                        The plot, I have not much to say on this. It’s the basic transmigration plot with a strong female showing who’s boss by whipping everyone around her into shape and assisting the former body’s into glory. This was neither done poorly nor spectacularly. So, it’s average.

                        Writing-wise, there is quite a bit of awkward sentence syntax and incorrect tenses. But the grammar doesn’t detract too much from the story for the average reader. Personally for me, it’s a little uncomfortable because of the strange manner of speaking and expression.

                        Although I don’t feel like continuing to read this story, that’s my personal taste. On a impartial stance, I believe you’re on the general right track. You only need to continue writing a lot and study English grammar and vocabulary, and your writing is sure to improve with time and effort. Keep at it, and good luck!

                          Author Question:

                          Thank you for replying again but I still have questions (sorry for asking too much) So the first chapter will start with the pool scene and then have himself a self introduction and issues? And what about his adoptive father that died, where can I include him? Though your reply did gave me some ideas like the pool incident where he froze the pool was one year after his adoptive father died in which where he triggered his "affinity" that made it more and more out of control but he still hasn't realized that he has this powers. Though the closest thing it can get was freezing cold air that can affect the weather but if he has remembered his adoptive father, this power would get really destructive resulting him in freezing catastrophe.

                          After his adoptive father died his friend "Ruri" and her parents agreed to make him stay in their house until he has graduate high school or have some money to have an apartment. Though I do want to mention. Is it interesting for readers at the scene of the pool happened because of the memory of his adoptive father or it happened naturally?

                          That is all I can ask. I am sorry for asking too much from you but I do appreciate your help, Thank you.

                          My Answer:

                          That’s all right! I do like to help if I can, but since I offered reviews and not necessarily writing mentorship, this’ll be my last answer so that I can move onto other people’s stories on the forum thread.

                          Although I did advise you how to begin your story, that’s only because I saw the start of it falling into some common pitfalls. For finding the best and interesting way to start after you deleted the info dump, dream sequence, and unimportant parts like running to school and going to sleep, it’s really now all up to you. I’m not going to dictate the direction of you story because YOU are the writer.

                          All of the information you just gave about his background sounded good to me. At this point now, it’s all about your own creative decisions. Don’t worry too much about if you’re writing the “wrong” or “least interesting” way because then you’ll never get any writing done. You can only improve the more you write. Then, once you’ve gotten most or all of your story done, you can revisit and revise it and ask for opinions then.

                          Lastly it would be hard for me to confidently say what to include or not include about MC’s background and exact way of depicting the pool scene because I don’t know the rest of your story and where you’re going with the rest of the story. Those decisions should be yours, and in this way you can improve yourself. So be confident in yourself, keep learning as you write. Over time, the more you write, you’ll see that you’ll get better and better. Good luck!

                            (Edited)
                            The truth shall set me free!!!
                            Title: Male Spy at an All-Girl's School!!Genre: Teen
                            Tags: Harem, Romance, Comedy, Spy, Mystery, teen, school, humor, romcom, agent

                            Read here!!

                              Lilliny You mean the anime right? If so, I have not watch that stuff for a long time, so I can't tell.

                                  Lilliny yeah, I haven't read the manga either, I apologize if I can't answer your question...

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