Note: If ur old and have a reputation, then please dont drop here, especially if u have a huge count of chapters, ur story maybe good but Im very picky on genres. Besides your path is already set in stones

Id prefer if the ones who post here are new and those who think their work is unnoticed, I hope those who post here have also few chapter counts so I can sound more genuine, since obviously I cant read them all. And no, im not asking for a review swap so please dont follow me and give me a review, Im already satisfied with my feedbacks.

I was hoping I could be as blunt as possible with your first few chapters because this is were the readers begin and they will decide if they want to continue or not. But if I dislike your work I would still rate you high for support, but I would give you notes on where you think u need improvements, thanks.

I also prefer if those people who just started this week or month,

    Hi there! I just joined wn about a week ago, and I'm still a newbie. Would you mind reviewing my story? I would gladly hear from your opinions. I'm open to any criticism๐Ÿ˜Š

    Title: The Whisper In The Ice

    Genre: Fantasy

    Status: On-going

    Synopsis:

    In order to find her father who had disappeared since the age of 10, Roxie was sent by her mother to a special school far from her home. Due to she had already discovered her power, accidentally. In her new school, she met some great new friends, as well as new enemies. This made her distracted from the focus of her main goal, which was to find her father. But, with the help of her friends, she managed to get some information about him, along with a little sprinkle of adventure on the way.

    Will Roxie ever find out about her father?

    Link to it: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-whisper-in-the-ice_17718418005514805

      I am sorry... I failed to understand your instructions. Just ignore what I posted earlier. Thank you! :)

        Hereโ€™s mine, Iโ€™m open to blunt constructive criticism since I know it would help a lot when it comes to improving my story. TIA.

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        ๐Ž๐Ÿ ๐†๐จ๐๐ฌ ๐š๐ง๐ ๐Œ๐ฒ๐ญ๐ก๐ฌ

        ๐™ถ๐šŽ๐š—๐š›๐šŽ: ๐™ต๐šŠ๐š—๐š๐šŠ๐šœ๐šข, (๐š‚๐š•๐š˜๐š  ๐š‹๐šž๐š›๐š—) ๐š๐š˜๐š–๐šŠ๐š—๐šŒ๐šŽ, ๐™ฝ๐šŽ๐š  ๐™ฐ๐š๐šž๐š•๐š ๐šŠ๐š—๐š ๐™ฐ๐š—๐š๐š’-๐š‘๐šŽ๐š›๐š˜


        ๐™„๐™› ๐™ฉ๐™๐™š๐™ง๐™š'๐™จ ๐™– ๐™ข๐™ฎ๐™ฉ๐™, ๐™ž๐™ฉ ๐™ข๐™š๐™–๐™ฃ๐™จ ๐™ž๐™ฉ'๐™จ ๐™ง๐™š๐™–๐™ก. ๐™…๐™ช๐™จ๐™ฉ ๐™›๐™ค๐™ง๐™œ๐™ค๐™ฉ๐™ฉ๐™š๐™ฃ.


        Cythera had many myths but there's always that myth. A story passed down from elders to their children until it became a myth.

        Hidden in these lands, sleeps a woman. They call her Mistress of Cythera, said to have the magic of every element know; a gift from the goddess Cytheria Herself, they said. Some said she is the daughter of two higher Gods, Cytheria and Oikos but was given a task to heal the lands once it is needed.

        Cytherians feared and worship her.

        Said to have the fiercest auburn hair to have, a beauty that may rival the other Higher Goddesses, the Mistress helped Cythera thrived until she left. The people knew the reason why she left, they abused her powers, always calling for help but never thanking or heeding her advice until she grew tired of fixing every problem they have. Angered by their ignorance, it is said that the Mistress have decided to give judgement once she awakes.

        The Elders have told their children to never disrespect the lands or face they wrath of the Mistress.

        The stories being spread by the scholars that the Mistress hides and sleeps to regain her lost power but the others believed that she left because the Mistress didn't like what she saw in Cythera and returned to her parents.

        But they didn't know she was waking.


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        ๐™ถ๐šŽ๐š—๐š›๐šŽ: ๐™ฐ๐š๐šž๐š•๐š, ๐š„๐š›๐š‹๐šŠ๐š— ๐™ต๐šŠ๐š—๐š๐šŠ๐šœ๐šข, ๐š๐š˜๐š–๐šŠ๐š—๐šŒ๐šŽ ๐šŠ๐š—๐š ๐™ด๐š›๐š˜๐š๐š’๐šŒ๐šŠ

        ๐˜ผ ๐™ฌ๐™ค๐™ข๐™–๐™ฃ ๐™ฌ๐™ž๐™ฉ๐™ ๐™œ๐™ง๐™š๐™–๐™ฉ ๐™—๐™š๐™–๐™ช๐™ฉ๐™ฎ

        Cerise is known for having an unearthly beauty in the paranormal community, men flocked to her in hopes of becoming hers, women either hate or want to be her. Beautiful women are dangerous, especially if there's a history she can not run from.

        ๐˜ผ ๐™†๐™ž๐™ฃ๐™œ ๐™ฉ๐™๐™–๐™ฉ ๐™ž๐™ฃ๐™ฉ๐™ง๐™ž๐™œ๐™ช๐™š๐™จ ๐™๐™š๐™ง

        Deimos, the King of Vampires has taken interest on the woman every man yearns for. Everything about her captivates him, even knowing this woman is dangerous to his kingdom, he wants her in his bed. She tempts him with her wicked smile, her touch seduces him, her entire presence sparks something dark in him.

        ๐˜ผ ๐™™๐™š๐™–๐™ฉ๐™๐™ก๐™ฎ ๐™จ๐™š๐™˜๐™ง๐™š๐™ฉ

        Cerise has a dangerous past that she can not escape and now, it's catching up to her. All the work she created in the human realm are now being threatened by the very thing she fears. Her dangerous past has now entangled Deimos and Cerise needs to protect him before it's too late.

          HotRedFlaming oh, okay. But I don't think so, I am always wiating for reviews so I can know my shortcomings to improve on them.

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