Not a review swap, but free collection adds
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AuHNG Hey, I already add your book to my library. https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/18425139706769805?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4314144361
Your novel is slice of life, so far. The prologue made it seem like it was going to be some sort of revenge/heartbreak story lol.
I just think you need to speed up the pace, work on your writing a bit, and the characters.
blurb has some mistakes.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-tenth-victim_18705056705660905
this is a thriller novel with lots of twists and mysteries!
ehh, your novel has some of the same themes as heaven's official blessing.
and I enjoyed 3/4 of that novel (HOB), (didn't really care all that much for the romance tho).
However, I don't really like reading your novel? Sorry, I dunno. HOB has mystery and humor, and a compelling intrigue that is established in the first chapter. I'll continue reading to see if my opinion changes later. Up to chapter 12 rn.
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link it next time, I'm lazy as a Cheeto, and a Cheeto can't move, y'know.
problems with writing and tropes. also use the author's notes, it's there for a reason.
your novel has a similar beginning to two webtoons I read, something about princesses, a father who's kind of a douche, and a sexist society that the fl has to change.
I didn't like reading them.
Anyways, I dunno, I'll continue reading maybe later. Chapter 6 right now.
four novels? wow.
I don't read locked novels, but it seems like your last novel is decently popular with 200 collections, which is pretty great.
Tell me one book to read specifically, and I'll add it to my collection, but I am too tired to read four books right now.
Chapter 1: Don't do this.
If you're going to do this, make it a bit more interesting, like maybe add their favorite foods or something.
You don't want character cards.
Or,
if you want something interesting, maybe write one chapter where you incorporate all those character traits. But whatever, since you already done that, all I'm saying is make that character list more interesting.
AuHNG
I understand that we have different preferences. Still I appreciate the time you spent reading it. At least you think my writing was not bad, which was what I was going for.
This is my first time to write, so I am still trying to get the feel of it. Developing my style and trying to gauge the interest of the readers. I am slowly learning from the critics and suggestions that I am getting from people like you who are not afraid to say the truth.
I was not expecting it to be phenomenal, but if I could entertain a few readers, then it would be great. I still want to give quality books that is worthy of a person’s time, so I really wanted to improve on it.
Thanks again for saying your opinion about it.
Don't write in present for novels, except for certain scenarios, first person perspective, and interpersonal/command usages. Novels generally should be with past tense. Present tense is very exposition-heavy, like someone is describing something to you, versus actually being immersed in the novel itself.
Anyways, I'll continue reading before I add any further critique