AuHNG
I understand that we have different preferences. Still I appreciate the time you spent reading it. At least you think my writing was not bad, which was what I was going for.
This is my first time to write, so I am still trying to get the feel of it. Developing my style and trying to gauge the interest of the readers. I am slowly learning from the critics and suggestions that I am getting from people like you who are not afraid to say the truth.
I was not expecting it to be phenomenal, but if I could entertain a few readers, then it would be great. I still want to give quality books that is worthy of a person’s time, so I really wanted to improve on it.
Thanks again for saying your opinion about it.
Not a review swap, but free collection adds
Don't write in present for novels, except for certain scenarios, first person perspective, and interpersonal/command usages. Novels generally should be with past tense. Present tense is very exposition-heavy, like someone is describing something to you, versus actually being immersed in the novel itself.
Anyways, I'll continue reading before I add any further critique
Also that, plus romance is like a genre that I over-read. I've read at least a hundred webtoon this year, and around 50 novels? Anyways, a good majority of them have romance. I would say that only a handful are romance-oriented and I actually enjoyed.
Try to see which romance novels you really like and emulate their style.
Also stay away from tropes.
ok maybe I'll enjoy it. I like thriller.
advice replace said with different words occasionally. Not gonna say anymore, until I read more.
I skipped to the latest chapters and they show extreme development in grammar and writing abilities, but the beginning is really hard to get through. Seems like the development is good tho. I really suggest for now, going back and editing past chapters.
Here's mine if you want to take a look Sea of the Forsaken
I'll go ahead and add yours to my collection
You need to be better at establishing atmosphere for a thriller novel.
Your blurb feels like a summary for a book report rather than an actual blurb.
Anyways, gonna continue reading.
Your writing has developed a style which is good, I can immediately see that in the first few paragraphs.
bad news is that some parts are still awkward strung together.
Characters are pretty distinct from another, but I really don't want to read another romance, so I might continue it later. added to collection.
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AuHNG Yes, I'm so inspired and a fan of Heaven. is it because it has the same element? It's fine if you don't like it, tho. I just want to know 
I'm good with that, also I'll edit the blurb, and I'm still improving my writing. thank you for checking it out!
https://www.webnovel.com/book/100-days-to-make-the-ceo-love-me_18434215605656405
Hi, this is a CEO and romance story so I am not quite sure if you'll like it. Have a great day!
I was reading really fast, but I'll see if it improves, good luck!
I was a really bad writer when I started writing, everyone is constantly improving.
one thing I recommend is working with an outline, and not making the romance cringy.
That's all I can say, cause tbh, most romance is cringy to me lol.
pretty cool.
How come it doesn't have more views?
I guess it's harder to get noticed on web novel now after they started promoting mostly featured novels.