Bunny_Junnie Reviewed yours (check the review). In addition to the review I posted, between us, I also would like to add:
- Some chapters have very lengthy paragraphs. It was hard to read for me. Please consider splitting long paragraphs into 3-5 lines max.
- The first chapter starts with a lot of dialogue. Why not introducing more description so that the reader has more time to slowly assimilate who's who?
- There are many grammar mistakes, even in the synopsis (he fall in love => he falls in love, from then he have to => he has to), please consider running your chapters through an advanced spell-checker. Try Word, or Grammarly (better).

This is my honest review to help you get more readers :)

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