Definitely Not Yue-bot: April 2021-Review Swap here!
Bunny_Junnie sure!
DelzGB Not at all, it was really helpful and kind! <3 <3 <3
captiun Thats actually a pretty decent amount of time. But I wouldn't consider it a lot. I usually take about an hour and a half to write 1800 or so words and then do a light proofread for half an hour. I let it rest for a day and then do a heavy edit for an hour and then another proofread for half an hour. At the end of the process it usually hovers around 2.5k words. So that's basically 3.5 hours for 2.5k words.
Dedz_ I'd also love to do a swap with you. My novel, The Star Child Games, is just shy of ten reviews. You should see my review by the end of the day. it'll be through my sockpuppet account, evilantonio430
Bunny_Junnie Done
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Madym Care to swap? With your cuffs and colar...
Mine: https://m.webnovel.com/book/amorous-devotion-for-his-mature-lady_18332439105256605
Bunny_Junnie Sure! Again, here's my link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-school-for-the-unimpressive_19777653505214405
YueYe Done! Check my review. In a nutshell, I love the character design and the writing quality.
Here are some thoughts for possible improvements, up to you:
- In Chapter 1+2, we learn Ji Rongxue's previous life was horrible and full of hardship, but it's not very detailed. To add more drama to it, why not tell more of her hardships? This will allow to develop further the character and give it a very strong will to live. Here's a book with a dramatic entrance, where the male lead dies and starts all over https://www.wuxiaworld.com/novel/the-second-coming-of-gluttony/scog-chapter-1
I was also curious: what was Ji Rongxue's good at in her previous life ? How did she live ?
The chapter 1 has a lot of dialogs as you explain the whole story of the book. I suggest to reduce it to make the first chapter more dynamic by telling less in the first chapter, but more in the next chapter. I would have loved a dialog in the first chapter, as the entire chapter was mostly made of only descriptions.
However, regarding the descriptions, they're well made!
- Chapter 3 +4 : the story seems to turn into a "slice of life". I am not sure whether there is a clear and strong motive for the main character. Is it just to live and enjoy life ? Perhaps "vengeance" or "becoming the #1" would be more interesting; (that's my personal preference, I'm not a big fan of slice of life novels).
Overall, it's very good! I'm probably not the right target for it, but no doubt other readers will love it more than I did. Kudos!
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Nr_Yet1208 Thanks for the reply! It's good to know. No wonder your writing quality is perfect. Kudos!
BlaccLotus ofc...
BlaccLotus btw if I may ask something why people are liking cuffs and color more than cuffs and whips? It is driving me crazy... C&C is just a simple story of a bar girl falling in love with a narcissist costumer whereas C&W is on another level, a s/m loving college girl reducing herself as a slave of a rich man for satisfaction. C&W is sucking my whole imagination and experience for writing it. I thought readers will like this one more.
Shivi_Pandey_5310 Hi. I wanna swap. Here's my link.http://wbnv.in/a/c8ftH1E
Sara_Wilcox Hi do you want to swap. The illegitimate Rogue and mermaid princess. This is my link. Give me yours.http://wbnv.in/a/c8ftH1E
BlaccLotus Hi do you want to. The illegitimate Rogue and mermaid princess. This is my link.
http://wbnv.in/a/c8ftH1E
Campoccino Reviewed ! It was a good read. Your writing quality is really top notch. The plot is interesting and believable. Good job !
David_Neilsen If it's not difficult for you, take the time to review my work. System, Adventure, Magic. https://www.webnovel.com/book/galaxy-duel-system_19647347106977005