Yoan_Roturier I'll change the title and we can keep it here. just ping me when u want to make a new one later.

Jo_J yeah no problem
I just want to see how I can make my novel better

Title : Ghost Busters

Genre : Urban(Male-leading)

Synopsis : A guy going by the name of Felix joins the team known as 'Ghost Busters' because of an invitation. A team consisting of 6 members.

Nobody knew his past, nor his personal info. Even his name Felix was an alias created by himself. What was about to come? Was the decision to invite him was correct or everything will crumble?

Felix embarks on his journey along with his new team to unveil the secrets and mysteries of the world, including his own past too.

However, there was another secret to it. Something related to him. Something which defied the laws.

Join Felix on his journey to explore the eerie, unreal, and perilous side of the world as he uncovers the mysteries one by one.

Link : https://m.webnovel.com/book/ghost-busters_20322367305200405

Epyonnn Would you please give my story an honest review as well?
Title: Abused Yet Indestructible Princess
Genre: Fantasy (Female lead)
Link: https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/19843668706580305?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4313436314

@Mayemura I've still been reading through Yulanei's book, so I'll get to yours eventually. I looked through your first chapter, and there are quite a lot of grammar mistakes and some spelling errors. Try to start by correcting those.

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Epyonnn Thank you

Epyonnn Thank you

@Yulainei I read through some more chapters, and your book is going in a good direction. There isn't really anything wrong that I needed to point out. Just make sure you correct the spelling errors and try to avoid massive encyclopedia entries when giving exposition.

@sammielane448
I'll post my honest thoughts here because I don't wanna have people in review swap asking for the same treatment. As for why I'm doing this for you, it's because you took the time to point out some interesting stuff.

Novel: Ember's Crown
Author: Clone_v2

First of all, I think the idea is interesting, but the way you write is a bit complex for a platform such as WN. Note that I personally don't have an issue with it. It's just that people from non-English speaking countries read on this platform and they form the bulk of WN readers. Their English isn't at a native level. That's why the most popular novels on this platform mostly have simple wordings and phrasings and blablabla.

So here are some suggestions to make your story more appealing to the guys here (basically a summary of what I left in your paragraph comments):

• Dialogs are hard to read sometimes. Not the content but the visibility/readability. You use ' to open your dialogs instead of ". I don't know if it grammatically correct, but I suppose it is. However, it is a common practice on this platform to use those brackets ". The reason is quite simple, it's because they are more visible. I sometimes surprised myself mixing your dialogs with your narration. Either because you forgot to close your brackets or because the paragraph was quite packed. Which brings me to the second point.

• Be careful of huge ass paragraphs. As I implied in my paragraph comments, it can be hard to read those kind of paragraphs on a smart phone. And I'm pretty sure that a lot of people on WN uses the app to read. So you might lose some readers this way.

• Your beginning was a bit jarring despite the interesting and rich setting. This problem might stem from the introduction of several characters in your first chapter that seem essential to the story. The issue with it, is that readers don't even know about your world and MC yet that they already have to learn about new chars. I think this should be more progressive. Note that I was also worried of that issue in my first chapter of "Ragnarök: Fimbulwinter Saga." However, it doesn't mean that you can't introduce multiple chars in your first chap. It's just that, I think, you shouldn't shift the focus so much. Towards the middle and the end of the chap, we shifted from one char to another. It was jarring because I wasn't familiar with those.

• Something else I noticed is the change of POV. From 1st to 3rd. Do be careful with that.

In conclusion, there is no problem with the story itself. Just the execution of the flow was sometimes jarring.

Hope it helps you improve your story.

I'll read you later mate.

Title : Cycle Of Nirvana
Genre : Comedy, action, fantasy, adventure, male-lead, mystery
Synopsis : A novel that moves from the weak to the strong in the world of cultivation. A novel that will immerse you in the depths for mystery, action and more
Link : https://m.webnovel.com/book/cycle-of-nirvana_20633838405203605

Yoan_Roturier Hey man, thank you so much for your review. It's helped me go through some of the major issues and edit for better effect and consistency and improve my writing generally.

One thing that you said, however, I'm still fighting. XD In the UK, single inverted commas are the traditional means of indicating speech in a novel, I've seen that trend diminish a lot over the years, mainly due to our cousins over the Atlantic's global influence, even still, I'm hesitant to let go of this one tradition. XD

sammielane448
You're welcome.
I more or less guessed that it was the case with the single inverted commas (didn't it was called that lol). If you really insist on keeping those, then try to find a way to prevent readers from mixing your narration and the actual dialogs. I think a good start would be to break down huge ass paragraphs. It'll help I think.