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Jo_J NO! Damn it! It should’ve worked! Soo much time lost I’ll copy and paste the review here shortly. Did you want me to re-read through and comment? I can’t do it for a few days, but I can redo them if you want.

Shamira_Farhath

Hi, I will do yours, but I can do that next week. I have an exam to pass in a few days.

Sara_Wilcox

Don't worry. I get what you are trying to tell me... I will try to correct it.

Sara_Wilcox

Don't worry. I get what you are trying to tell me... I will try to correct it.

silent_walker Thank you I will try and take your improvements when I can. Right now my biggest concerns are plot and interesting characters but thank you for telling me about the structure problem. Honestly this is the best writing advice I've gotten in literally all my time here.

silent_walker Thank you I will try and take your improvements when I can. Right now my biggest concerns are plot and interesting characters but thank you for telling me about the structure problem. Honestly this is the best writing advice I've gotten in literally all my time here.

Donniedrako15_
No problem...

Ah, by the way. If someone cough @Sara_Wilcox cough wants to review my novel here's the blablabla.

Title: Return of the Woodcutter
Genre: Fantasy (Action, Transmigration, Adventure, blablabla)
Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/return-of-the-woodcutter_19721218806187705
Synopsis:

Iris, a foreign world engulfed in war, direly needs help. To replenish their troops and fight off horrors from the worst nightmares, the gods resurrect and summon living beings from another world: Earth.

Aito Walker, a broken man, is one such ordinary being amongst many others. Upon his revival, he will be put to the test during deadly trials.

He will start with almost nothing. No overpowered magic, no cheat skills, no-nonsense divine armors, no godly weapons. Only a peculiar system, increased strength and his wits as the best weapon.

Bearing a sin—he could not, cannot, and will not forget—haunting him to this day, Aito will strive to regain what little honor he has left.

He will suffer. He will fail. Taking advantage of his weaknesses, pain, anguish, sorrow and fear will gnaw at his sanity.

But a powerful yearning will keep him from falling apart. An ever-burning flame melting away the despair and welding back the broken pieces of courage.

A single desire.

“I will find redemption no matter the cost.”

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Or not, hun, who knows? The book isn’t done yet. Haha—

SLAP!

“Who put this guy in the synopsis narration!? Get him out of here and launch the warnings! Now!”

WARNINGS:

• Update schedule: 5 times a week. No updates on the weekend (MY TIME ZONE, meaning it might not be your time zone.) It WILL change if the book gets ENOUGH SUPPORT.

• You will find a few typos, grammatical and wording issues, that’s certain. There are issues in almost every book on this website. I'll do my best to bring you guys quality content and such issues will either be nonexistent or extremely few. However, one man can only do so much. If I get enough support, I’ll hire an EDITOR that will look at the chaps with a fresh eye. And POOF! Issues no more. Improved quality. Happier author and reader. Not sure if the editor will be happy tho.

• If the book is to your liking, do add it to your library and maybe drop a few (A LOT) of power stones. Since I’m taking part in the WSA event, it is a welcomed help.

• The first three chapters are fast-paced as to quickly get into the nitty-gritty but slow down afterward to give the story the time it needs to progress accordingly.

• The book can, never mind, it will contain “strong” language, gore and violence.

• Comedy, as you know it (and if you don’t, now you know) is subjective. So you might not like the jokes.

• I do not own the cover. If the original owner sees it and is displeased with his work being displayed here, send me a mail: writer.yoanroturier@gmail.com

• By the way, if any of you are willing the provide me with an original cover picture, I’ll be really, extremely, immensely thankful. (The possibility of that happening is downright impossible tho.)

• If you truly read that until the end you have my virtual congratulations ‘cause I sure as hell wouldn’t have done that.

I can imagine you being extremely busy with previous requests but oh well, might as well try my luck XD

Title = Grimoire: Atonement of Souls
Genre = Urban Fantasy (Action, Supernatural, Mystery, etc)
Link = https://www.webnovel.com/book/grimoire-atonement-of-souls_19254392005805605
2 line summary = The story is about a 16 y/o boy, Aarav, who accidently gets involved in an age-old war between Grimmers (Grim reapers) and Masks (demons) when he tries to save a little kid from a group of monk looking assailants.
Synopsis =
Aarav ran away.
Who could really blame him, though? The list of things Aarav that didn't excel at was long and humiliating, borderline pathetic even. A list that included fighting too. So when he encounters a group of monk-looking assailants in black with books floating next to them, ganging up on a little harmless kid…he wasn't exactly sure how to deal with that situation. More so, when that strange encounter snowballs into him being attacked by a giant tentacled monster; he did the only thing he excelled at—he ran away.
Being able to see the dead since his birth was strange enough for him but being chased by a monster was taking things a bit too far. But now thrust into the strange world of dead souls, demons and grim reapers; Aarav has to make a choice. Does he continue to live in the ignorance of the blurred lines of two worlds, or will he muster up the courage to do what is right? To save the people close to him, no matter the lengths he has to go to achieve that goal.
Even if it required his own death.

Extra
- Upload schedule = 3 times a week i.e. Mon, Wed, Fri (IST time zone). I am trying to increase it back to 5 times a week as I used to before, maybe even more if given enough support.
- Prose = I'm a one guy army with no editor to clean up after me. I do try to make sure it's as clean as possible with fewer mistakes and typos but chances are they escape my sight nonetheless. The comedy elements are also very...well, I'm not sure the norm but if you like it, then great. If you don't, well, nothing can be about that. There's quite a decent amount of 4th wall breaking so that's one thing to look out for too. I do advise to atleast finish till the 9th chap named "The end...?" since that's like one mini arc of that 1st volume that basically introduces everything.
- Begging for likes = IF you read it and IF you like it, I do hope you add it to your library and give it votes every now and then.

Yoan_Roturier TITLE : WHEN DEATH SKIPPED A SOUL: LIFELESS

GENRE: SCI FI - ACTION

SYNOPSIS:

Her limbs were numb.
Her blood was dried out.
Dark purplish veins were making a long stretch around her pale skin.
No scent, no feelings.
Nothing but body.

Walked like dead
And lived in death.

She walked through out the woods for how many times it is, day after day with fellow deadmen.
It is funny, she thought. She can't talk but she can clearly think, hungry but not with flesh, dead but alive.
But one thing is a fact; she isn't human, because the dead treated her as one.

Then everything took a swift turn when a military unit invaded the woods together with the people she saw in her memories.

Now will they unfold this phenomenal incident?

LINK : https://www.webnovel.com/book/when-death-skipped-a-soul-lifeless_19978747105177005

THANKS! I REALLY NEED AN HONEST REVIEW.

wewee
Seeing how many people are already in the queue, you're gonna have to wait quite a long time ^"

You can also ask for a swap amongst other people from the thread that might be interested.

Yoan_Roturier
No problem... Take your time...

If anyone want any honest review from me... Reply to this. I can do one book per two days...

Yoan_Roturier I’m doing my two chapters right now, then I have Donnie’s review to do, so I will do yours the day after tomorrow(I need sleep and a shower).

Donniedrako15_ I will finish yours tomorrow. Do you want me to leave comments like I did in the first chapter? So far not many errors, and it’s intriguing. I like the entrance that the MC makes

silent_walker Hey! I am interested in doing a review swap with you.
I will read your story by tonight and leave a review when I am done.
Please do the same when you get time.

Thank you!

Yoan_Roturier
Lol... why am I suddenly scared?

wewee You're synopsis is quite interesting. I'd be willing to give your novel an honest review. I'll try to get it out in a few days or so.

In case people missed my earlier post, I'll be willing to give honest reviews as well as long as your novel isn't too long. I'll be most willing to help out new authors hat don't have many reviews yet.

Jo_J Thanks buddy. I'll wait for your review.

Epyonnn I don't have much reviews. Would you give me honest review.Here's mine
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/20020920706660905?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4316824033

Shamira_Farhath Sure. There's one other book that I'm gonna review first.

@Shamira_Farhath I gave your novel a quick look for now, and in your synopsis, you forgot to put spaces after many of the periods and commas. Also, I suggest clarifying that Atlise is another planet in your synopsis, because I thought it was a person at first. It may be confusing.

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@Shamira_Farhath I've read the first chapter in your novel, and I'll be honest with you: I found it nearly unreadable.

First and foremost, the grammar is utterly atrocious. It looks like you may have typed it out on your phone. Please remember to proofread your work at least twice so that you can catch as many mistakes as possible. Within the paragraphs, there are dozens of places where you forgot to put spaces after punctuation, and there are numerous run-on sentences. I suggest getting a grammar editing program, such as Grammarly (if you're willing to pay for it), but I know that not everyone has it in their budget to invest in grammar software. In that case, you can try improving your grammar through sites such as NoRedInk and GrammarBytes. Remember that people will only read your novel if they can understand the sentences, and unfortunately, I could barely understand one bit of it.

Secondly, I want to mention that you directly started off with exposition. Other than the book's cover and synopsis, the first sentence makes one of the biggest impacts on whether or not a reader will keep reading. Sometimes, exposition can be interesting, but you don't want the first half of your first chapter to be exposition. Sometimes, moves may start off with an expositional sequence, but that is generally frowned upon unless you have to give complex information that is difficult to show in the story. For example, "Blade Runner: 2049" had to use text in the introduction to convey information that is absolutely necessary for understanding the plot. Keep in mind that people have low attention spans these days, so you have to capture the reader's attention like a magnet and don't let go. If you even have an opportunity to conceal your exposition through character interactions and action, do so.

To enumerate my previous point about the value of first sentences, take for example the first sentence of George Orwell's "1984."

"It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen."

This single sentence manages to enigmatically set a scene that will leave readers wanting to see more. Note how Orwell juxtaposes the adjectives "bright" and "cold," by not only placing them next to each other but also using those words to describe April, which is usually a month filled with warm days and rain since it's in the middle of spring. Additionally, the second part of the sentence describes how the clocks were striking thirteen, something completely different from our normal world. Thus, Orwell expertly sets up the dystopian world that he continues to describe in the rest of the chapter through the viewpoint of the main character, Winston Smith.

To sum up my advice: get good at grammar and make the first chapter grab the reader's attention strongly as possible.

Epyonnn
I think you shouldn't give examples of Gorge Orwell here. No offence, I like his writing style and I know Gorge Orwell was the founder of the Orwellian style like looking through a clear glass. But it's damn hard, I try to follow the similar way as well, but then went to more simpler and easy going... It's still a long way for that.

Moreover, I don't think anyone would understand those terms and expositions if their grammar is as terrible as you showed.

Epyonnn
By the way can you give a honest opinion of my book, if you have time. I only want to know how you felt after reading it, like is it immersive? are the characters sympathizeble? And most importantly descriptions, can you imagine the place I've written.
I only asked you cause you seemed to be a man of culture.
It's totally understandable if you don't have time... People have their one issues in life.
Thank you.

silent_walker Sure. I'll give your novel a look. As for the George Orwell example, I only gave it for the sake of my point about first impressions, because I feel that 1984 has one of the best first sentences in any novel I've read. That's why I made sure to keep my discussion confined in the beginning without going too in-depth about anything else.

Epyonnn thanks.

And I'm one of the first line culture people as well. You might find something like that in my book as well.

By the way, @silent_walker , use "said" as a dialog tag more often. It's smoother to read than the ones you keep using. Those ones are called unusual dialog tags for a reason. It is recommended to keep them under 40% ratio usage.