Itsuki_Suzuki With all due respect, I can tell that you didn't actually read the story. The review is generic, and after further investigation, I found that it was identical to all your other ones.

I understand wanting to get as many reviews / views as possible, but that is not my goal. I'd be willing to leave a review of your first chapter, but only if I get a legitimate one from you in return.

    Arlemit I'm done giving you reviews.

    I can only suggest fixing the paragraphs and indents for the sounds like boom, woosh.
    Good use of terming sound, but much more if you give it an impact.
    After the description of the sound, put the bracket. [BOOM!] [WOOSH] [SWING] [RING] if you want to catch the reader's attention on what sound it is. You may remove them, actually, since you already describe them in the story, yet that's only my suggestion.

    Good job writing it!

      ANDYY_X

      Thank you so much andy. I'm touched. I'm trying to be fine. This issue is devastating.

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