Shreya2711

As hitler once said "promise 10 deliver 6"

i read till 6 and i dont understand anything about the plot form the story only thing that i get is from the Synopsis
and your introduction. its like a few chapters were cut from the beginning.

The writing was too much. it seemed to get better, but in 1-5 chaps a lot of the sentences were wired. its like i understand the words, but not the meaning of them. i cant explain really.

sometimes you say something over and over again
"She once again looked here and there to find that person. She stopped a moment ago because she felt a certain someone's presence familiar. She thought that she knows that person but don't know who it is!"

"She once again looked here and there to find that person. She stopped a moment ago because she felt a certain someone's presence familiar, but don't know who it is!"

its hard do read and i can't really explain why. when i got to the 6 chapter i was too confused many things were said many times i didn't know where i was what was going on. maybe in the later chapters it is explained better, but yeah this is what i can say about it.

Im not an expert i've read novels for like 1 year and only got into it cause of manga and anime. the story seems interesting asf. it seems that it could be a great novel, but the wording and things said over and over again should be fixed. get grammarly or something. it seems like it was put through google .

One of the most important thing for an author is to make the sentences as short as possible and get through as much meaning as possible. Anybody can just ramble on and on. (like i'm doing right now), but if you want to make a good story it has to get the meaning through. thing said once should not be said again right after (well if its for a joke then it can)

and if you cant tell im putting my words through google

and going into the future to repent for their mistakes do you mean the past?

(so in conclusion from the 6 chapter the plot that you describe is interesting, but i couldn't find it or understand it. there was no intertation, like there was some chapters missing from the beginning. there is a lot of potential for a great story, but the sentences have to make sense. 3/5. )

good luck on a great novel.

      FatHitler Thank you so much for letting me know where the story is going wrong. I do admit that my first chapters need fixing.

      The very first chapter was about a past memory of protagonist. It is explained through a dream. That is why it seems stranded.

      About next 9 chapters, I wanted to explain the daily life of the protagonist. The volume name itself gives the general idea about it.

      I will once again go through my chapters again and try to make it less wordy ^ ^

      Last thing I want to say is sob sob I really got improved in the later chapters...

        FatHitler Before I start... What should I exactly have to do?šŸ¤”... I mean I should fix first 10 chapters right?

            Shreya2711

            not an expert or a good reader. but what i would recommend is to make things more clear less wordy i guess and make them more cleaner. there is no spelling mistakes which is good, but the sentences sometimes just confuse me or don't make sense for me.

            the first chapters are the most important in my opinion. so you should try to make them better. if a person reads till 10 chapter hes already invested into the story and is going to overlook some things and be more patient.

            i get that your trying to reveal the time travel and other thing in the future chaps and that thing seems to be interesting, but the first chaps didn't grab. they confused me, but i would say im not a really regular reader and if a thing doesn't grab me in the 1-3 chaps i go. it did grab me with the medicine thing and the mask thing and the business things seemed interesting, but the wording confused me and ruined it for me.

            and definetly going to try to read it again when the wording gets better.

            so i dont know. do whatever and have fun.

            wishing luck from Fat Hiter.

                FatHitler I am glad that you liked the medicine and business idea! I will surely fix my beginning chapters, I don't wanna lose readers like you who patiently read my novel! Thank you for the advice, it helped to solve my confusion and most important problem.

                    9 days later

                    FatHitler So, since you are picking random stuff, I might as well try to recommend my random work. But, it still only have 3 chapters on, a lot less than you asked...

                    But, if you are interested in a way shorter read than you asked, here is the link:
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                    Synopsis:
                    A story about a young guy, who goes in a adventure in search for some magic stones and find himself adrift in the dangerous events of the world around him.

                    If you are not interested you can just ignore it, sorry for it being too short.

                        4 days later

                        Random novel generator? Get a list of novel names in text format, plug it into a random name picker? You can try finding it online?

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                        If you just want some novels recommendation ... maybe drop a description of your type of novel and see if we can find a match?

                          FatHitler You are just the kind of reader I want. Honest about your opinions.

                          I shall apologize to you in advance as there aren't 100 chapters, but I think that's a good thing. There are 14 chapters so far so it is easy for you to decide whether you would like to get invested in the story or not. I release two chapters a week (so you're not going to be bored a lot).

                          What's my story about? Well, I'm glad you thought of asking (or not). It's about descendants. Think of them as demigods. But demigods of which pantheon, you wonder? Well, all of them.

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                          Why do I recommend this story:
                          - It's got a great worldbuilding.
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                          If you do enjoy it, I would love for you to add it to your collections.

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                              Hi, I'm a new author and I'm trying to improve my writing technique, any comment on my first work will be welcomed. Thanks.
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                              Title: Chronicles of the Drakes
                              Genre: Steampunk Fantasy
                              Link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/chronicles-of-the-drakes_20329297905264305
                              Synopsis:
                              At the dawn of the 20th century, the world underwent a technological boom, as well as an increase in warfare, giving rise to a war economy, controlled by the dark intentions of shadowy organisations.
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                                I don't know if it fits into your description but this is realistic fiction. Perhaps it's worth a try.
                                Synopsis : Do you know how we've all made mistakes? Some worse than others. Imperfection is key, journey through the ends of the Earth, and not a single perfect soul shall be found.
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                                Thanks to the agency their lives they have to suck it up and deal with each other.

                                They are both forced to share a house, not the best thing ever but that begins the journey to a life of perfect imperfection.
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                                    FatHitler Please try this one:

                                    Title: Herbs & Lotions ā€“ The Busy Life of Alfraed Logick

                                    Genre: Fantasy

                                    Synopsis:
                                    In a world where magic lives and mysterious civilization found, Alfraed Logick opens ā€œHerbs & Lotionsā€, a shop selling various medicine, potion, and lotion.

                                    Under guidance of a mysterious master, the young man becomes an adept healer who possesses abnormal strength and stamina, fluency in ancient language, and willingness to go the extra mile. With these abilities he promises to make the shop the best in the world, and live the lifestyle of his dream.

                                    In his endeavor to promote his products to the world and earn extra income, he will unexpectedly have encounters with heroes, kings, elder dragons, demon lords, demigods, and many more, some become trusted friends, some bitter enemies, and one of them is the love of his life.

                                    This is the story of Alfraed Logick's busy life.

                                    Release rate: at least two chapter per week

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