@Harem_Queen Left you a review just now. One thing I didn't mention in the review - there's a couple times in chapter 2 where the love interest's advances are compared to being like a webtoon or a romance manga. I love webtoons and romance manga's, but I'd be careful describing your own writing that way. I think it can fall into cliche fast, because your breaking the immersion of the reader a little bit. In my opinion its like, "well this is a romance webtoon essentially, so I expect stuff like this to happen anyway" I don't necessarily need to read the character feeling that way.
Feel free to disagree, it's my personal opinion so I didn't include it in the review. My story is here: https://www.webnovel.com/book/god's-little-helpers_24072808906930305

    JustGoDie13 Appricate the honesty! I'll make sure to read yours and leave a review before the day is over! Thanks for taking the time out and read my story. I'll try to improve myself!!!

      Isabelle_Kenny

      Hiii Yes I'm going to leave a review on your book I'm reading other peoples books as well but I'm going to leave an honest review about yours as well XD so many books to read please bare with me at the moment you'll get your review today 😃

          World of Knights

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          David is considered the player who most developed his territory and who completed the most missions in the game [MMORPG: World of Knights] released in the early 23nd century.

          After 5 years of venturing into the game world, he led his commanders along with his legions of troops to storm the 99th floor of the abyss, and finally, he was the first player to successfully kill the Eternal Night Abyssal Dragon.

          However, when teleporting to the 100th floor of the abyss, there was a short circuit in his computer and he lost consciousness. Upon waking up, David found himself reincarnated along with the game's system into a young 15-year-old, Makai Collins, the youngest son of a duke in a fantasy world.

          This is my entry for the WPC #314, Role Playing Game.

          For other authors, I am not exchanging revisions.
          Thanks!

          f0011 Just left a review on your story. Gotta say after chapter four things really took a dark dive and I'm curious to see how things are going to play out!

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