@Harem_Queen Left you a review just now. One thing I didn't mention in the review - there's a couple times in chapter 2 where the love interest's advances are compared to being like a webtoon or a romance manga. I love webtoons and romance manga's, but I'd be careful describing your own writing that way. I think it can fall into cliche fast, because your breaking the immersion of the reader a little bit. In my opinion its like, "well this is a romance webtoon essentially, so I expect stuff like this to happen anyway" I don't necessarily need to read the character feeling that way.
Feel free to disagree, it's my personal opinion so I didn't include it in the review. My story is here: https://www.webnovel.com/book/god's-little-helpers_24072808906930305

    JustGoDie13 Appricate the honesty! I'll make sure to read yours and leave a review before the day is over! Thanks for taking the time out and read my story. I'll try to improve myself!!!

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    Hiii Yes I'm going to leave a review on your book I'm reading other peoples books as well but I'm going to leave an honest review about yours as well XD so many books to read please bare with me at the moment you'll get your review today πŸ˜ƒ

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