pink_lollie24 Hey greetings I've done reviewing your novel and left a positive review however the critical one will be here just for you as it doesn't concern readers much just affects them lol

So. The story has a lot of potential, and I found the characters to be well-developed and distinct. Each character has their own unique voice, which is great. The dialogue is engaging, and the overall plot is captivating. However, there are a few areas in the writing that could benefit from some updates. While the story is great, I noticed some minor issues with the writing style that could be addressed to improve the flow of the narrative. Despite this, I think the story has a lot of potential, and with some adjustments to the writing, it could be even better. Keep up the good work!

      AbyssalVox I have posted my review of your book on the official website. However, I would like to give some critical feedback here as well. The cover of your book is nice, but it's not particularly catchy. I would suggest trying to make it more appealing and eye-catching. I would rate the cover 3.5 out of 5. As for the synopsis, I think it's solid and unique, so I would give it a rating of 4 out of 5.

      Your storytelling and character development are exceptional, earning a solid 5 out of 5. You have truly excelled in these areas, and it shows in the quality of your writing. While there were a few minor grammar mistakes, they weren't major issues, and overall, your writing is fantastic. I didn't find many negative aspects in the book, and the positive factors outweigh any negatives. This is a rare find, and I thoroughly enjoyed reading your book.

          Kage007 Been meaning to read your novel saw your post in another form, had some other reviews on my plate at the time. But I have some time now so I'll give your story a whole read through and I'll get back to you on here and leave an honest review on your story. Keep going strong. If you would like anymore feedback or criticism it's easier to get ahold of me through discord. NocturnOwl#0230

              MrFay I wanted to give your story a read after seeing you in the forum's for quite a bit. I'll be giving it a full read through alongside some other reviews I have lined up. I'll probably end up getting back to you on here, after leaving a review on your work. If you have discord, you can reach me easier there for any other feedback. NocturnOwl#0230

                  MrFay No worries you didn't come off negative at all, I really appreciate you taking the time to write all this ! It's very helpful and I'll definitely try and improve upon the areas you've talked about. Thank you so much c:

                      https://www.webnovel.com/book/primal-online_25529472006430205
                      any reviews, comments, and or advice are greatly appreciated!
                      small summary: Since childhood Wyatt has always followed the advice of the adults around him. Study hard! get a good job! honestly not bad advice the problem is that's all he has ever done. Stuck in a daily mundane loop Wyatt struggled to latch onto any interests. That is until a new game called Primal Online comes out.

                      I'll be trying to read through as many novels and leave reviews as I can tonight!

                      MrFay Thank you for my feedback. Writing is the only thing I can do decently and I agree that my cover is not very good. I'm not visually inclined so I'm actually planning to commission an artist friend to help out with my cover because again, my aesthetics are awful.

                      Also, I know this isn't the forum for it, but I would love to get connected with some other writers and help each other with editing and feedback for their writing! I would get a lot of motivation if we could be in a group or something (This is open to anyone if you are interested!) The webnovel discord has been slow with verification, so I haven't been able to get into the full discord server, and would much rather be around a few other authors and grow together 🙂

                          AbyssalVox

                          https://discord.gg/YYGjkRsMWw

                          I agree that it would be cool to have a smaller group to encourage each other with editing and feedback! I’ve created a discord server called Webnovel Writers Community 😀 literally a few minutes ago though so yeah it’s open to changes, y’all can join and suggest new genre channels etc. if you want! Lemme know if the link doesn’t work but I think it should be okay

                              MrBtheNovelist Hey! Wanna have a swap...I'll do yours for chapters starting from 9 and you can do mine from where they are locked....

                                  AbyssalVox Well let's create a discord server drop your ID we will make a community with Writers supporting each other!

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