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Moonwriting
Thanks for the review. As promised, here is my constructive opinion.
If you break the paragraph for dialogue, it would help in easing the reading flow.
Some words are input wrongly. e.g grasped instead of gasp. If you need help in minor grammar/spelling, try Grammarly. It's free!
Some of your repetitive sentences may be excessive that it might break reading flow. Tbh, I do the same mistake as it is quite addictive for my ear lol.
Your story is def a page turner for me eventho im not a fan of fantasy romance.
Cheers! x
hansora Hansora
I doubt you need my constructive opinion considering you're pretty good. But to be fair, I'll share it since I did the same to the others.
Yours is well-written. One thing though, it's my first time seeing the term 'my old man' referred to a husband. Nothing wrong here. Just stating.
Ngl, i actually can see baby blues and baby pink in my head and "felt" cool breeze as i read all the four chapters you posted. The kinds i normally get when i feel utterly calm and that warm fuzzy feeling.
Cheers! x
@ZeroX0666
Sure, let's review swap!
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please wait for my review too 
ah, the term 'her old man' was just because they got to grow old together before she went back to her past
