Rin_Nurnia
done reviewing your book.
As I posted above, here is my constructive opinion on your book.

  • Tbh, i thought I was reading the wrong book since the first half of the initial chapter did not share the same name as a synopsis. Nothing wrong here, just stating.
  • There is a slight confusion in the first chapter as to who says what. Also when the second half of the second paragraph took a while to register until I finally get what it mean.
  • I didn't expect it to be that dark! The terrifying kinds. So job well done in executing those. So good it creeps me a little.

Tharish99
Done reviewing yours. Will share my constructive opinion on your book after you give an honest review on mine.
Cheers! x

        PerkyPompous_Pixie
        Thanks for you time and wait! I wanted to make things a little proper since you spent some time just writing an entire paragraph

        This contains [spoilers.]

        ->Overall, I'm enjoying this, I love bloody things and I've been served on a silver plate.
        ->Congratulations for making me worry, that's a little rare, I managed to get the plot around Audrey a little quicker than it was written, so the mind-game with the few clues you left behind was awesome.
        ->One of the strongest contrasts I observed was the gentleman's thoughts versus his speech, it fits his appearance more than his attitude lol, but you gave Audrey's point of view by calling him a teddy bear-like person I believe.
        ->Minus point, I still don't know why the heck he hates them so much, I agree with free violence though but it's simply not said yet on your published chapters. I don't like this plot hole because unlike the plot it's not mentioned at all but could finely contrast with what's going on between the two.
        ->Be careful not being too fast with this kind of Beauty and the Beast twisted version. I did saw he wasn't able to call her by her name, which dehumanises her the most in Frederick's house. I need more contrast, just peculiars details to delay the story but can help me understand the alchemy!

           Thanks for your attention, I had a great time reading.

            @Maylin
            Thanks for the review and I honestly was not expecting this so thank you very much for this.
            As promised, here is my constructive opinion. Do remember that my opinion may not matter much to a male-audienced book.

            • Some sentences are quite long. Felt like I need to catch a breather after reading it. Maybe if you could shorten them, it'll ease up reading experience.
            • Some of the details/info can be kept separate or in a different chapter so the reading flow does not feel like we are moving here and there. Or you can withhold said information and release bit by bit so it'll leave reader guessing and wanting to know more.
            • In Chapter 1 where he held a knife. was that knife meant to attack himself or her? Nothing wrong here. Just curious.
            • Personally the second chapter is more of a page-turner than the first one. Just letting you know, in case the first chapter drives people away.
            • Loved the way you portray your MC - Totally justified his frustrations. And the MC love for books is very endearing. Your world building and its detail is awesome. Just from reading your book, I could feel your hard work, dedication and effort in it.

              SaberKey I reviewed your book, I liked it a lot! Well done 😃

              For anyone interested in doing a review swap with me, mine is here:

              Storm Brewing / My Entry to the WSA 😃

              Plot
              Emma was always hyperactive and full of energy.
              She loved the stories her Grandfather used to tell her when
              she was little of fantastic beasts in the Dark Woods.
              After he passes, she sets out on an adventure from the advice her Grandfather gave her when she was young. She finds out just how special she really is, and just how real her Grandfather's stories were.

                  Tharish99 Thank you for your review. As promised, here's my opinion

                  • Break down the paragraph for ease of reading flow.
                  • Breakdown the dialogues
                  • I do notice some minor mistakes. It doesn't really hinder reading as our brain would automatically find the correct word but if you need help with minor grammar/spellings and don't know how, try Grammarly. It's free.
                  • Not sure if it's just me, but the mannerisms of the people when having a dialogue are almost the same for all.
                  • I love how feisty and sarcastic the FL is. I do wonder why she was covered in eggs and flour in almost all baking classes? I mean, why aren't there any action considering its repetitive.

                  Cheers! x

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