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LuciferVermillion
Howdy!
Can I borrow some of your time for a review swap perhaps? I believe mine will be well-spent with your work.
Mine is a age-restricted novel because the foundations of the story are quite the sturdy material to hammer. I believe there is no overly explicit scenes nor whatsoever romance to find so far.
Still, I hope there'll be enough to catch your attention.
You can find it here!
Have a nice day.
Stardreamer12 Actually, I've read it does not content any inc€st in the reviews his novel has, the author said it in a reply
_Orange_ Up for a power vote swap? Here's the link to my book:
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Please let me know when you are done. I'll do the same for you for sure.
LuciferVermillion thank you, english is not my language and maybe this is why it is hard to read this. I read few chapters of your story (I will continue soon) and your style is hard for me 
You will get review but I need some time.
LuciferVermillion I want to fix grammar issues but I don't want to change my style.... Friends promised me to help but it ended on promises sadly and I'm trying to do this alone 
But thank you very much for being honest
LuciferVermillion
Thanks a lot. I really like this. I'm a new writer so I'm not that experienced. But the difference is obvious, I could picture the scene clearly. I will make sure to be more descriptive in my future chapters. And make amends to the previous chapters.
MayDreamer Thanks for your review. Which book of yours do I review?
Uh, no. I wondered why people keeps misunderstood that it's a harem/incest. Despite how many female characters there are, but those also goes with the male characters too. Instead of harem, it's more like multiple couples.
I read tilll Chapter 19.
Here's your review:
- Oh la la. Well done. Truly a well done.
However, I find the storyline to be a little... classic? There goes a prince. A mysterious sword. An evil dragon. The death of friends in order to grow.
But that's ok, fantasy novels usually goes like this.
Still, there's a reason why I won't be giving rated reviews.
Because I don't like classic old fantasy anymore. To me, swords, magic and something evil is already a relic of the past. That's why my work goes more to... something much closer to reality. I don't need any big boss with mysterious power.
Anyways, truly splendid. And I'm envious you had an editor. Btw, are those pictures you put at almost every chapter meant for imagination?
Oh well, here's my work: The Impossible Fate That Leads To A God Of A New World
And I suggest maybe you could start from Chapter 3.
LuciferVermillion
Review is ready~ Thank you for your time with my story.
_Orange_ Give me the name of your book. Unable to open the link.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/a-journey-that-changed-the-world._26048832306064405
review, comment and vote for my novel and il return the favor.
LuciferVermillion
From chapter three? I'll give your work a proper go so from point-blank and give it a frank go at once.
Thanks for your time, thanks for your point of view, I had yet to see this kind of defect to a story, indeed a classical can be quite boring.
For the pictures, I find it precise as a color guide more than an imagination shackle. The mood of each chapter can be felt through the few images I've chosen (warmth, coldness, fantasy, richness of the experience (mc going out of his routine)
Have a great day, see you in your work.
If anyone is interested in review and collection swap then here's my book. Will review yours after you are done reviewing mine.
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For WSA 2023~
Warning: mature content is present, read at your own risk.
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Despite her trying to sound cool, he could hear her slight pants.
"What were you doing?" He asked, forgetting everything.
That's how it was for them. They could be in the middle of the most serious issue yet the slightest change in their breathing would make the other curious.
"If I say that I was, or more like, am fingering myself while thinking about you, would you come here and f*ck me?" She said while putting two fingers inside of herself.
A moan left her lips and his d*ck hardens on the other side.
"F*ck, Andrew, ah," she was moaning on purpose, to get a reaction out of him.
She wanted to test him till he breaks and later fulfilled her with his entire being.
She knew that she wasn't supposed to want him and so did he but the heart wants what the heart wants.
And forbidden fruits always taste better.
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Tangled by an interesting past, lust, and underworld matters. And most importantly heart.
Both of them refused to fall for the other again but for how long? In this twisted game called lust, would they end up falling for each other?
If anyone is interested in review and collection swap then here's my book. Will review yours after you are done reviewing mine.
Link: https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/25800187705948605?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4317414678
For WSA 2023~
Warning: mature content is present, read at your own risk.
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Despite her trying to sound cool, he could hear her slight pants.
"What were you doing?" He asked, forgetting everything.
That's how it was for them. They could be in the middle of the most serious issue yet the slightest change in their breathing would make the other curious.
"If I say that I was, or more like, am fingering myself while thinking about you, would you come here and f*ck me?" She said while putting two fingers inside of herself.
A moan left her lips and his d*ck hardens on the other side.
"F*ck, Andrew, ah," she was moaning on purpose, to get a reaction out of him.
She wanted to test him till he breaks and later fulfilled her with his entire being.
She knew that she wasn't supposed to want him and so did he but the heart wants what the heart wants.
And forbidden fruits always taste better.
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Tangled by an interesting past, lust, and underworld matters. And most importantly heart.
Both of them refused to fall for the other again but for how long? In this twisted game called lust, would they end up falling for each other?
LuciferVermillion LuciferVermillion
To be fair, I wasn't expecting a pink cat-girl to be part of the main intrigue
I'll go beyond anything the current comments consider cringe, I love this kind of sauce, to be fair I'm missing the nostalgia and it's much welcomed. There are a lot of people complaining about thing's they've once loved in their teens.
I happened to find some random capital letters amidst sentences, also I've noticed you're not always using the same kind of apostrophe sometimes which enhance a kind of irregularity of your writing style ''' ```` ’’’. I know, the difference is slim but noticeable still.
You've added parenthesis in the mc's speech in the first chapter to explain the reader who was Pearl, I don't think it's a smart way to introduce a character.
You've picked up a nice atmosphere and a fine world-building. I like the way you can describe living things moving around, it gets me into the story easily.
Chapter three is THICC
There is a very lot of mechanisms explained for the first ten chapters, quite the toll to learn for a new reader
I liked the humour but the sexy-ish bits feel a little forced. Magic - ranks - the many animals Lucifer has, next to it the instructions he had for his meeting at the academy feels a little dull.
Thankfully there aren't plenty of new characters to introduce at once.
Finally, I don't like capitals letters for loud noises or shouts. You've performed well for moans, whispers and so on by depicting the character and its actions instead of (idk by what magic) shrinking the letters
The same should go for shouted text, describe it more to give it life and sense instead of a literal bug on the screen.
That's it for now, I'm enjoying the reading so far, there isn't much I can add besides a few comments for ow, I'll be continuing it some more later, you got me curious.