DKQ heheh thank u!
LoL Actually I have the intention to change some mistakes in early parts. but sometimes I didn't have time or just forgot. LoL. But I'll try to find some free time to fix it. At least after the Inkstone bug problem was finished and fix.

And about uk and US really sometimes I didn't notice that cuz in Indonesia, some of indonesian will mix it together without our knowned. May be it become habit . 😂😂😂

    alostgirl I finished reading 5 chapters, not my taste as I rarely read romance type of novels but I can easily identify this is a copy of vampire diaries, I wouldn't say it is a bad thing but its just very similar. The first thing I have talked about in my thread is copying someone else work, it is fine if you want to make it into something similar but copying is very bad without permission. Let us go through the common mistakes first and identify the mistakes:

    mistakes

    • Grammar (minor mistakes)
    • Phrasing (an issue which can be resolved by referring your work to other novels)
    • Sentences (No balance, need to refer to a comment above I made about sentences)

    Some mistakes as I have talked about can be read out loud and this will help you improve by leaps. I hope you the best and good luck with your work!

      DKQ I think u mistook my work, but only two character names are from the series, but rather than that, nothing really matches. I choose the characters name from that series, bcoz I like them.
      Thanku for the advice, I will make sure to improve in the future.

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        Hey, this is really a good topic! Definitively useful for writers. You have my respect @DKQ !

          alostgirl I have reviewed it based on me being a reader, If I was the author I will have the mindset of writing my uni essay (bad headache time) that is why I am a bit strict while reviewing other novels, I rate your novel based on 3 things.

          Rating review

          • General view (Reference based on, a country created in and topics used)
          • Language usage (US English or UK English)
          • Age Limit (Is it safe for all or not)

          This is my main focus during reviewing novels after doing it for a few days, if it was in uni I would most likely focus on the major, language and ignore the age limit. I hate including gender while reviewing as this will lead me to be biased towards one gender so I will only go through the text for most the novels and forget about the gender. So when I reviewed your novel here is

          What I don't want to see

          • Mistakes that will destroy your gem
          • Basic errors
          • Phrasing

          This is not only to help you but help myself in the future if I want to start writing as it will teach me and you. The biggest problem while being an author is not looking at our novels from a reader point of view which will not only affect us but others who read it leads to bad reviews and bad comments destroying the novel. I apologize if I have made any mistakes and will reflect on it, keep up the good work!

            DKQ I really like ur work, as I said, thanksalot for the valuable points and for your time on my work as well.

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              @DKQ i've redone ALL 46 chapters with Grammarly, even edited the first few chapters trying to break down the skills rather than have it hit you all at once, tell me if it's better or not now please :kiss:

                DKQ Yo man, thanks for the review... I really appreciate it.. Would have replied a long time ago but I'm having issues with my WiFi.. I sent you a discord invite man....

                Thanks again...

                P.s. please read my Novel... Hehehe

                  DKQ Yo man, thanks for the review... I really appreciate it.. Would have replied a long time ago but I'm having issues with my WiFi.. I sent you a discord invite man....

                  Thanks again...

                  P.s. please read my Novel... Hehehe

                  • DKQ replied to this.

                    DKQ I don't have much experience with discord but am willing to learn and help you set the server up. If you want help? I would also like to help review novels if you still want help?

                    • DKQ replied to this.

                      creativewritting That would be great, will contact you when I create the discord server, most likely within 12 hours as I am writing a new article at the moment for my uni. Helpers are welcome as I plan to mod all those that want to assist with the novels.

                      Requirements are basic English for all those that want to help out. Reviews will be posted through this thread while the discord will be used to get a better understand on the novels we will review.

                        DKQ I'd like to join xD I'll try helping in the reviews but I'll be putting up my novel there for reviews most of the time.

                          aaaaaa1wewew Hello author, I just finished reading the first chapter and was really surprised to see this style of writing, has a feeling of poems and the emotions are well placed! Certain issues has been found sadly such as:

                          Issues

                          • Grammar mistakes [Few, would recommend Grammarly on that part]
                          • Transitional phrases [patriarch part before passing the role of the family head, few during the start and end]
                          • The balance between sentences [Short outweighs the long sentences, improvement can be done by expanding the scenes]

                          there are more minor mistakes but most are common and can be fixed by reading it out loud. Another thing I wish to discuss would be the usage of Irregular verbs, this can improve your novel quality and improve your writing a lot. Hopefully, this helped as I still am inexperienced, good luck and keep up the good work!

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