Opening up a review party thread but with a fixed target audience. After all, we all have our preferences and it is just right to actually read the story you're reviewing, right? I personally read the story (although it may not be the whole thing) but I know some of you don't!

That said:
Shamelessly promoting my story! If you were to read and leave a review, I would also take time to check out your story. πŸ™‚

You may be brutally honest in your reviews.

Here are the genres: Shoujo/Josei, Infrastructure, Romance, Apocalypse, Pregnancy, Game Elements, Adventure, Kingdom Building

https://www.webnovel.com/book/altera-city-in-another-world_25926694405418805

SUMMARY:
Althea was one of the few surviving humans of Terran Star after a calamity that ended the galaxy. The strange force of the universe helped them immigrate to a strange new land, forcing them to create a home for themselves.

The survivors were depressed. First they were forced to survive in a zombie apocalypse, and now they had to survive a new world altogether?

It just so happened that Althea was one of the few people who got the Lord Token. Would she be able to build a good home for her children and fellowmen?

Garan, after several brushes with death, finally found a clue to his wife. However, before he could hug her, he saw her hugging strange adorable children instead.

"..."

    OldNispy

    Awesome. Give me a couple hours, I have a couple of things to do but I will definitely get to reading some chapters and leaving some comments. Thank you so much! I see your point a lot of terrible things happen, but it may not be a tragedy at the end. I haven't wrote the last six chapters. I Didn't do an outline with this book. so I'm not 100% sure if it's a tragedy or not, Do you think I should change it? I just read your comment. Do you think it has do many details, like it is bogged down?

        NinaChroni oh gosh pls dont hahahha

        If there's a major love triangle, most of your readers would be wishy washy romance readers (like me)! Hahhahha

        BUT if the natural storytelling led to a tragic end... Well... You do you. πŸ˜‚

            Rokuman_24

            Hmm, the way it's heading, I was actually thinking about ending the book with a cliffhanger. I tend to write books that women go from being weak to strong. They also usually are involved in a love triangle.This is not is not intentional, I guess it is just how my brain works. I have actually been considering giving the love triangle a bigger role. Thank you for your feedback.

                @"Nispedana"#p619586m
                Hey, you said you want honest feedback, so I am trying to really consider the story. I'm not used to giving feedback because I hate to offend people, but I only noticed a couple of things. There was a typo near the end, when she is speaking about the Nanny( hasd.) There's only one other thing that I noticed in this chapter, and it's a personal preference. You address the audience a couple of times by using you and there one more. It's perfectly acceptable to do this, it just sometimes throws people off. It's really hard to write a story where you are addressing the audience,
                but it can work, if you do it well. usually, instead of saying 'you could tell that she looks like a tomboy", you could say, "it was evident that she was a tomboy." Or something like that. I now that's an uncommonly used word, so keep it how you want it... My daughter says I use too many big words, but I think she means to many uncommon words(lol). This is just my opinion, so you don't have to take it, obviously Thank you!

                NinaChroni
                NinaChroni

                      Does anyone know of good Shoujo/josei stories with Game Elements? Like virtual reality or systems

                        I'm interested in strong female lead books that ARE NOT systems or isekai and don't have harems and rape content. Any recommendations?

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