@"Nispedana"#p619586m
Hey, you said you want honest feedback, so I am trying to really consider the story. I'm not used to giving feedback because I hate to offend people, but I only noticed a couple of things. There was a typo near the end, when she is speaking about the Nanny( hasd.) There's only one other thing that I noticed in this chapter, and it's a personal preference. You address the audience a couple of times by using you and there one more. It's perfectly acceptable to do this, it just sometimes throws people off. It's really hard to write a story where you are addressing the audience,
but it can work, if you do it well. usually, instead of saying 'you could tell that she looks like a tomboy", you could say, "it was evident that she was a tomboy." Or something like that. I now that's an uncommonly used word, so keep it how you want it... My daughter says I use too many big words, but I think she means to many uncommon words(lol). This is just my opinion, so you don't have to take it, obviously Thank you!
Review Swaps - Female-lead stories Or NO CP
NinaChroni thanks so muchhhh. I'll definitely apply this to future chaps hugs
OldNispy hey wanna do a honest review swap with me? I will do the same for you.
My link: https://www.webnovel.com/book/zuomeng-to-dream_24984202306740805###
Sereinchoo ###
I'll check it out~ will send a review when I've read enough chapters
NinaChroni
Hey, I would be happy to trade to, if you are okay with that.
Sereinchoo Done!
Do check out mine as well
https://m.webnovel.com/book/altera-city-in-another-world_25926694405418805
Does anyone know of good Shoujo/josei stories with Game Elements? Like virtual reality or systems
I'm interested in strong female lead books that ARE NOT systems or isekai and don't have harems and rape content. Any recommendations?
OldNispy Will get back to you soon ~
Sereinchoo Thanks~ your story was very interesting!
SapphoAndHerFriend I would love to recommend but the titles are so long I really don't remember anymore xD
What setting do you want?
Period? modern? Interstellar?
OldNispy Hello done with yours too ! Quite enjoyed the story.
Sereinchoo thank you I liked yours as well
OldNispy I will start reading in a bit. Look out for my review in a few days.
This is mine 
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/24846674506238905?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4322669381
Grace_Harley1 sure sure will check it out as well
Grace_Harley1 Read a few chaps first and left an advance review~
I'm ok with any setting really. My favorite book on the site so far Ascendant Struggle http://wbnv.in/a/e1hYYCN is like mid 20th century but with mechas lol.
Sci fi would be great though. I love a good scifi
SapphoAndHerFriend Thanksss
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Would be glad if you can review mine as well
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/26314402806964305?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4318788988
I would love to trade reviews . I just want to let you know that I'm really behind right now and I will probably not be able to get to it till tomorrow evening time or Monday morning. I just I got I got a little overwhelmed with stuff and I'm still I got up like five more reviews before you. I mean I'm still trying to post another book but I definitely, want to do the review trade . I just want as long as you're okay with with it with the time frame I might be able to get it to it sooner just depends on how my day goes today. I have another book I'm getting ready to post today it's a vampire werewolf hybrid she's a Demon Hunter. I don't know if you'd rather read that. the one I have up right now is a sci-fi fantasy but it's a dark sci-fi fantasy so either way if you need a link or you won't have any questions let me no.