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SnoozySloth I also thought I would write a book on 70-100th words, but the reality is cruel. Went to 126th, but the book does not want to end. :)

Maili
Just to make sure were on the same page, when I said book I was refering to volumes. For example, Harry Potter is 7 volumes.
Still, plenty of books will go longer. I'd be shocked if none of my volumes end up going past the average.

SnoozySloth yup... my problem.

Next novel I'll be going Korean style - super fast plot progression, the entire story can end in 80 chaps! Like "The Breakers" on wuxiaworld - that was pretty good!

EldridSmith
Hmm. May want to ask your English teacher to grammar check it like a graded paper. She may also not be used to stories, so might not do well at fixing the grammar in them. Many english teachers only ever grade essays and such. When I first started writing stories I had good grammar because I write tons of research papers and such for college. But my writing flow and character emotions left a lot to be desired.

SnoozySloth I think that's my problem too. Writing research papers was a lot different from writing stories.

SnoozySloth Fair point, thanks for the help.

Novel writing is basically linked to your imagination. If you can imagine something great, then its always a good idea to make it into a story if you can readers for it, regardless of you being paid or not.

The greatest hurdle one may face in writing is expressing their imagination. You might have some good idea and you can even imagine it with great vividness, but can you express it using your writings?

If yes, then write it, and don't rush your story. Make sure you write every supporting or bypassing character properly and give them personality. They are not there to just waste words, give them a strong purpose which supports overall story. Any supporting character who is not adding to our protagonist cause is filler character, try to avoid them.
For example, our protagonist wants to become the strongest person, but a supporting character wants to become a poet. If supporting character's dream helps protagonist cause somehow, then he is adding to the story, otherwise, he is there just for the sake of being there.

The protagonist must have a distinct goal. it doesn't have to the final goal as he can set new goals for himself in the middle of the current goal or after achieving the current goal.

These are the lessons I have learned in my time of writing a story.
My biggest mistake in my story was that I gave the protagonist a big powerup at the very beginning, but fortunately, I restricted his ability to use most of it.

I wrote my first novel a couple of weeks ago. It was a story that floated in my mind for a long time. And I wanted to make it happen so I decided to finally write it. The story at the beginning might seem rushed but it settles down after the first fifteen chapters( after getting powerup).
I was hoping some people might look at it and review it, so I can correct my mistakes and write a better story which I enjoy writing and others enjoy reading.
Death: A Shadow of Darkness
There might some grammatical mistakes here and there (such as the wrong comma), but I will correct them very soon.

SnoozySloth two things that I could fix without messing up the story and having a headache... moved the backstory to Aux Volume, added 1 chap to explain the driving force of why things happen... you're right, it'd be too much to try and fix it unless I did a full reboot.

And deleting/ reporting on inkstone is horrible!

SnoozySloth lynerparel Ierrech

OMG you have too much time on forum. Go write your novel. I mean trash chapters.

Skully_ :cry: I think that's true... I spend more time fixing chapters than writing.

But I find my problem is gaining new readers, not keeping readers...? And that's where early chapters seem to matter

Hi, guys! Since there seems to be some serious (ly good) reviewing going on in this thread, I just wanted to poke my head out and volunteer my novel, Godking: Ascending the Heavens, for some reviewing. It was previously titled The Traitor God.

As someone who has written typical 'English-style' stories before (long descriptions, tonnes of worldbuilding etc.) writing a webnovel has made me consciously change my style quite a lot to become faster paced - I'm just worried I've swung too hard to the other side.

My strategy was to go fast-paced (perhaps its only fast to me, also a problem) and slowly introduce character description and the world. In short, I'm worried my novel's little tidbits of worldbuilding here and there are too scattered/little for readers to feel immersed.

If you guys could have a look and share some thoughts here, that would be much appreciated. Thank you!

Lord_of_Potatoes sorry, having a headache and difficulty to read through now.

The story is good! I'd score it 4 or 5 for every point except updates and world which I can't tell yet, haven't read much.

The story and characters are nice, the broken speech of the younger sister is interesting!

So is the way Blade plots against him.

I wonder why you don't have more interest - probably because there's no hook or really cool thing to catch a reader in the title, synopsis or first chapter?

Maybe put 2-3 paragraphs of AFTER he has gained power at the start? Then flashback to the start of the story?

Something like, "On that fateful day, what I had thought to be disaster turned into a world-changing encounter. One that would change me and my sister's lives forever.

Brimming with power, I could barely suppress the desire to pay back those who plotted our suffering..." etc etc

So that a casual reader who is just looking for cool stuff can read it and look forward to him rising up in power - and finds the motivation to go through the beginning chapters.

I find a large part of the audience on WN is quite young, with short attention span. They have so many novels to read. So if the first few parts aren't "cool!" enough to hook me, I might give up.

Lord_of_Potatoes when I see all these "wuwuwuwu" in speech, "Thump, thump, thump", I'm close the book.:)

Maili what ways of showing sound effects have you liked...?

Maili

AHAHHAA the things that happen to your writing when you read too many originally Chinese webnovels! Will take this into account.

I kind of think adding onomatopoeia to stories helps add physicality and impact - they make action scenes feel more action-packed, rather than just an author going blahblahblah. But that's my personal writing style, I guess!

Thanks for checking it out :)

I'd be thankful for any reviews and feedback people can give on Classmancers - A MOBA Esport Story.

It's a very experimental story, as I haven't found any other stories trying to do an esport shonen this way. Still figuring out what works and what doesn't.

Also, I can't tell if the story doesn't get much attention because it's a niche genre or because the writing is flawed. So, that'd be great to know.

Synopsis:

Yuel’s life changes when Classmancers rolls into his life, a MOBA video game that’s growing into an official sport. Even with the fitness of a slug, he can finally enjoy a team sport to the fullest!

Unfortunately, the joy is short-lived. None of his peers take the game as seriously and his ruthless tactics only further discourage them from playing.

Fed up with playing alone in the game’s toxic online mode, he sets out to find like-minded teammates. That’s when he meets Lars, an energetic goof with godlike mechanical skill. With Yuel’s brains and Lars’s brawn, they form a dynamic duo and aim for Classmancers’ pro scene.

But first, they must conquer the competitive scenes of middle school and high school. There, they’ll come face to face with the truth: they’re not the only talented players around.

Lord_of_Potatoes i'd rather reply here so other more seasoned WN authors can help?

What is unique about your novel or characters? Is there something you can point out that is different or trendy right now?

Mine was originally "Rebellion Against Fate". Simply changing the name to "No System? No Problem! But it's hard to get a date when you're stronger than titans!" got me 5x the daily views.

Danmachi for example. What would you call it?

In truth, the "picking up girls in the dungeon" doesn't come through in the show - it's more like, Bell inspired by love to seek greater heights and to impress Ais.

But danmachi's title and description sell!

DarkClaymore I added your book early on! It's so interesting and something I've been wanting to write! But probably will never do.

Will get round to reviewing later tonight! Or tomorrow...

Maybe like, you can cross reference to what I wrote about danmachi title and how to "sell" the idea here Ierrech . For example, when I view your book title in mobile, I don't see MOBA prominently. I have to click in to realise it's about that!