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DeJeL
Also thank you forthe link. It will be very helpful.

I'm new author too Give me a try? I started 1 week ago. My novel is 'Beyond the Mask'

mdrm
The synopsis:
I'm 38 years-old single woman that had died because I gave my heart to my dear mother. I have very reliable siblings that will take care of her in my stead.
On her journey in another world, she changes its fate and finds her happiness.

The first-person (I) becomes third-person (she, her) in just a few sentences. You should be consistent. And why not introduce the protagonist's name in the synopsis.

Regarding the dialogue
-Mirta!!! How did you get here!? I was searching for you!

Change it to
"Mirta!!! How did you get here!? I was searching for you!"
It's something of a standard. Also easier to read.

mdrm hey I also felt that maybe you need to change the way your dialogue is presented.

For example, here's a dialogue like yours:
=Mom, it's okay.

You could change it to:
"Mom, it's okay."

To make it much pleasing to the eyes. But I really like your story! Do you have a discord? So we can communicate more! I want to share pointers with you

mdrm Hi I just wanted to thank you for reading my new work I'm the demon lord but I died and now I'm the hero's best friend. Thank you for reading, also I'm going to read your novel, once I'm free. :)

Misguided_Rooster
Are you up to Romance Fiction? If so, would you mind taking time to read my novel as well? It's an original and my entry in the last Writing Prompts #31. Here's the link:
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12143997505993905

Thanks in advance,
Misguided_Rooster

Dawsonrose Hello, I'm a new writer, too. Would you please take time to read my novel as well?
Here's the link:
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12143997505993905

Bibliophile_Anna
'Issues' I've found(IMO):
1. The title - These types of titles are very repetitive in romance novels just like those with 'heavenly' or 'rebirth' they are kind of a turn off
2. Synopsis - Too long and some grammar mistakes. You should simplify it, you're adding too much detail
3. Grammar - Very few grammar mistakes; 'Jia Li's mother reminded her upon seeing her 𝒓𝒂𝒏(running) 𝒕𝒉𝒓𝒐𝒖𝒈𝒉(toward) the door'

KimSasha It was reeeeaaaaly interesting!!!!!!!!!

It felt realy fresh for me and it did make me read more. Keep up the good work!

mdrm Thank you~

I am happy to have achieved my goal then. I wanted to do something different. I hope people will appreciate it and give it a chance since it is far from being the kind of story that there is on the site. I take a risk, but who doesn't try anything, has nothing.

KimSasha
True. I hope that you will continue your work and get what you want

mdrm what is your discord Tag? For example mine is #5546?
You can add friends by:
1. Go to the toolbars
2. Click "Friends"
3. Click "Add Friend"
4. Type in the username and discord tag.

Example: Dawsonrose#5546

Try it if it is works!

Misguided_Rooster I appreciate your honest feedback and really grateful for the suggestions you shared. I'll work on the things you'd said. I hope to make it better. Thank you so much!

Dawsonrose
I send a friend request to you. could you please accept it?

The synopsis of your story seems really interesting! I will definitely take a look!
I have recently posted a new story too, hope you can check it out if you're interested! (It's also a reborn story!)
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12016971206761305/Reborn-as-a-Sea-Spirit

I think your story is nice. I hope you can read mine, too. I know my words are too mainstream but anyways.

https://m.webnovel.com/book/12137193405983005