1Life yeah, adding onto the post of 1Life, if you type word you want then thesaurus and go on thesaurus.com, that site is also great. I use it a lot myself.
Original Books: The Good, the Bad and the Fugly!
Zetheryl ikr. I just came back to see 13 notifications with about 7 being review requests. I originally wanted this to be a forum post of do's and donts for original authors.
So I'm trying a thing where I switch from 3rd omniscient to 1st person for dreams. Is that one of the switches that annoy you? And do you have any advice on what paceing you think is too slow?
This was awesome! I love you bro!
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creativewritting
hmmm, switching between 3rd person to 1st person for dreams...
Have you got something separating the dreams from the reality like for example:
Reality Text
Dream Text
If you do, then that's all fine. It is not switching that bothers readers, it is if it is done with no rhyme or reason. Even if you didn't have a divider of Reality and Dreams (as I am calling 3rd person and 1st person perspectives respectively) it should be fine as long as you make it clear that it was a dream at the end of the dream and beginning of the 3rd person perspective again).
If the readers know that 1st person = dreams and it is indicated in a way that flows in the story then it should be fine.
For example, if the main character had a dream (1st pov) and woke up afterwards(3rd pov); their friend asking them if they had a nightmare or some form of informative dialogue that still flows in the story would be fine.
To summarize, it is not about WHAT you do, it is about HOW you do it.
creativewritting
As for pacing, that is much harder to explain.
Pacing in a story is different based on things like the writing style, perspective it is written in and the personality of who is telling the story (the personality of the perspective).
For example; if your book is written in the perspective of a character who is really lazy, then you are not going to have him walking into a bar describing the number of warts the old hag behind the counter has right?
If the character is lazy, then you should gloss over unimportant details (to the character whose perspective it is in, NOT if you consider it unimportant).
Try to put yourself in the shoes or pretend you are the character whose perspective the story is told in.
What would that character consider important?
Maybe the character loves his alcohol? If so, describe the wide variety of alcohol on the shelf behind the bar's counter and ignore the old hag who is disturbing the fine view.
Pacing doesn't matter, as long as you can create a story that immerses the reader.
If you are doing an omniscient 3rd person (as you mentioned), then use interesting and descriptive language.
Be realistic with how long stuff takes.
Let us say the lazy, alcohol addicted guy spends a few seconds looking at the alcohol.
To him, since it took much longer, be more descriptive if you are doing a 1st person of his perspective.
For the omniscient 3rd person, just say something like "After glancing at the selection of alcohol, the man turned to the bartender who had a dozen warts on her weathered face"
Pacing isn't about how fast the story moves; it's about how things in the story are described, how the perspective of the story views things within the world.
Does the main character have many thoughts during a fight?
Or does the main character think fights happen quickly?
That is what the very definition of pacing in a story is.
So, I am not the writer and I did not create the characters.
I can attempt to judge the pacing by immersing myself into the storyteller's perspective, but I will not be as accurate as the creator of the story.
It is up to you to decide the pace of the story, the character and thus, the perspective the story is told in, was created by you; therefore, you should be able to self-reflect and analyse your work far better than anyone else.
Forsaken1
Thanks, man.
Ecstatic that someone over the internet loves me, not sure my parents do ;)
(note: am joking btw, but still funny joke haha)
Elude
Ohhh btw book, I fixed up the synopsis and some stuff in the story. Thanks for the advice man.
Cool. Thanks for the advice!
WorstNameEver
I would really appreciate if u could spare some time in reading my novel too
https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/11937296205631505
WorstNameEver Do you even learn anything when taking college English? I'm almost done with English 101(I'm ony final paper) and all we've done is write essays about how stuff made us feel :/.
WorstNameEver Could you take a look at my novel as well?
FilledWithHope
True thats all it actively teaches, but usually those discussions and schoolwork tends to improve how well people can express themselves via writing.
If you get what I mean
14 days later
WorstNameEver
Check mine out
Synopsis
"Quincy"
"Yes darling"
"I'm not yours yet"
"You were mine the moment I laid eyes on you
"
"Quincy"
"Yes darling"
"You're too old"
"I heard older guys are spicier. The spicier, the better. I wouldn't say old, I'd say mature
"
"Quincy, go home 
"
Quincy Davis shamelessly claimed Seraphina Jacob as his. He liked her at first sight, but he fell for her at the first "hello".
"Sera"
"Yes Quincy
"
"My eyes are up here"
"Oh My. I prefer the two dangling eyes between your thighs. The nose in between is saying hello to me. Hi little Quincy. Let's get to know each other well in the future"
"Sera, eyes up here not down there
"
Seraphina Jacob shamelessly claimed Quincy Davis as hers. She liked him at first "naked" sight, but fell for him at the first "kiss".
This is a fluttering story about Quincy and Seraphina, and how their love blossomed in the Summer.
https://m.webnovel.com/book/12472705706547305
Innovation I am a fan of having people help the author correct their mistakes and stuff but there is a limit. I don't mind pointing out two or three mistakes in a chapter but when the author has a half dozen in the first paragraph and literally hundreds of mistakes it's hard to make the effort. Sometimes I wonder if it would be an entirely different story if I corrected all the errors. Would it be different enough for me to call a fanfiction? I think it might be.
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Please check my novel out if you have time
https://www.webnovel.com/book/12497669806640505/Hanging-out-with-the-Mutants
Synopsis:
In a certain universe, there are humans who developed superpowers known as ‘mutants’. A guy who can read minds; a guy who can shoot lasers from his eyes; a guy who can control metals; a girl who can cause storms, and a girl who can control things with her mind. They are just some of the small population of the mutants in the world. One guy, who neither have superpowers nor any mutation, is hanging out with them. But, what they did not know is that he has a much stronger ability. This is his adventure
12 days later
QueenCL Emojis are annoying. FIx up the grammar.
"a guy"
"a guy"
"a guy"
"a guy"
"a girl"
"a girl"
Bruh, did you not see the other dude's comment about not using the same words in a paragraph?
Also, guy is a sh*t noun. Is this a comedy or slice of life?
a month later
Alright guys, I am going to clarify just what this post was meant for.
It is mainly meant for the answering of peoples questions about grammar, English, story ideas and other such stuff. I don't care if people are willing to review or judge novels here because I have done it a couple times myself.
However, please keep in mind this is a novel discussion chat, not a review swap chat.
WorstNameEver
I'm an English speaker and I agree about the terrible grammar I see in the more popular original novels. It's really hard to read, but I doubt I'm doing much better. At the very least, I go back to previous chapters and check for errors before publishing while I try not to repeat words too much (This means I actually dish out a thesaurus). If you're still taking offers, I would like your opinion about my novel. A comment about grammar would do far more than a single review.(It's easy to miss errors if I'm the only one reading)