Elude Thank you for your valuable advice. I was able to correct my typos in the synopsis and tried a different beginning for the synopsis (I guess it is better). Please do check on the novel and the synopsis. Both Greg and I will be happy if you give out a comment or two advising us. Recently Greg's been upset since the comment section is empty!

      i wonder where my novels will be labelled at. hehe

      i guess im not that fluent but i consider myself average. haha

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        1Life yeah, adding onto the post of 1Life, if you type word you want then thesaurus and go on thesaurus.com, that site is also great. I use it a lot myself.

          1Life yeah, adding onto the post of 1Life, if you type word you want then thesaurus and go on thesaurus.com, that site is also great. I use it a lot myself.

              Zetheryl ikr. I just came back to see 13 notifications with about 7 being review requests. I originally wanted this to be a forum post of do's and donts for original authors.

                  So I'm trying a thing where I switch from 3rd omniscient to 1st person for dreams. Is that one of the switches that annoy you? And do you have any advice on what paceing you think is too slow?

                    creativewritting
                    hmmm, switching between 3rd person to 1st person for dreams...
                    Have you got something separating the dreams from the reality like for example:

                    Reality Text

                    Dream Text

                    If you do, then that's all fine. It is not switching that bothers readers, it is if it is done with no rhyme or reason. Even if you didn't have a divider of Reality and Dreams (as I am calling 3rd person and 1st person perspectives respectively) it should be fine as long as you make it clear that it was a dream at the end of the dream and beginning of the 3rd person perspective again).
                    If the readers know that 1st person = dreams and it is indicated in a way that flows in the story then it should be fine.
                    For example, if the main character had a dream (1st pov) and woke up afterwards(3rd pov); their friend asking them if they had a nightmare or some form of informative dialogue that still flows in the story would be fine.

                    To summarize, it is not about WHAT you do, it is about HOW you do it.

                      creativewritting
                      As for pacing, that is much harder to explain.
                      Pacing in a story is different based on things like the writing style, perspective it is written in and the personality of who is telling the story (the personality of the perspective).
                      For example; if your book is written in the perspective of a character who is really lazy, then you are not going to have him walking into a bar describing the number of warts the old hag behind the counter has right?
                      If the character is lazy, then you should gloss over unimportant details (to the character whose perspective it is in, NOT if you consider it unimportant).

                      Try to put yourself in the shoes or pretend you are the character whose perspective the story is told in.
                      What would that character consider important?
                      Maybe the character loves his alcohol? If so, describe the wide variety of alcohol on the shelf behind the bar's counter and ignore the old hag who is disturbing the fine view.
                      Pacing doesn't matter, as long as you can create a story that immerses the reader.

                      If you are doing an omniscient 3rd person (as you mentioned), then use interesting and descriptive language.
                      Be realistic with how long stuff takes.
                      Let us say the lazy, alcohol addicted guy spends a few seconds looking at the alcohol.
                      To him, since it took much longer, be more descriptive if you are doing a 1st person of his perspective.
                      For the omniscient 3rd person, just say something like "After glancing at the selection of alcohol, the man turned to the bartender who had a dozen warts on her weathered face"

                      Pacing isn't about how fast the story moves; it's about how things in the story are described, how the perspective of the story views things within the world.
                      Does the main character have many thoughts during a fight?
                      Or does the main character think fights happen quickly?

                      That is what the very definition of pacing in a story is.
                      So, I am not the writer and I did not create the characters.
                      I can attempt to judge the pacing by immersing myself into the storyteller's perspective, but I will not be as accurate as the creator of the story.
                      It is up to you to decide the pace of the story, the character and thus, the perspective the story is told in, was created by you; therefore, you should be able to self-reflect and analyse your work far better than anyone else.

                        Forsaken1
                        Thanks, man.
                        Ecstatic that someone over the internet loves me, not sure my parents do ;)
                        (note: am joking btw, but still funny joke haha)

                            Elude
                            Ohhh btw book, I fixed up the synopsis and some stuff in the story. Thanks for the advice man.

                                WorstNameEver Do you even learn anything when taking college English? I'm almost done with English 101(I'm ony final paper) and all we've done is write essays about how stuff made us feel :/.

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