So i have a rule on qidian original section that i judge the whole webnovel by its synopsis, yours is written very poorly so i won't even bother wasting my time reading your work, but i will point a few errors in your synopsis since i'm in a good mood.
Avery" FemmeFoxtrot" Bailey??????????? what are these quotation marks for?
was diagnosed with a terminal disease that was untreatable. Terminal disease = untreatable hence why its called terminal, so saying it twice only makes it sound silly.
The next sentence is just a mess i won't even bother with it.
Next paragraph starts as if its a continuation of the previous one and it doesn't make sense, then if you keep reading it further you feel a slight twinge of pain in your left hemisphere as you try to deduce the meaning of that sentence.
I rate it 1.5/10, you know the alphabet and how to arrange the words into something that resembles a sentence.
On a serious note, if you are truly passionate and want to write then you must practice a lot. Write more and read more to improve your vocabulary, and most importantly you need to study some English grammar. To me it seems like you never read a book that was written in English and you try to mimic the closest thing you know, the webnovels on this website. And i'm telling you to not do it, because most of the translated work here is not really English.
There are many FREE online courses for writing and some of them are even on Youtube. My favorite fantasy author Brandon Sanderson has some great books that might interest you and he also has free lectures on youtube on how to write a story.