CCmei Hello! I know that this is an older post, but I went through the comments and noticed that you were still trying to do some reviews. I would really appreciate a honest critique of my new novel: The Misadventures of a Perpetual Bridesmaid.

Link: https://m.webnovel.com/book/16991723805053205

It’s still new, almost twenty chapters, but it’s entered in the spirity contest so I rather know sooner than later if there are ways I can improve. Thanks for your time and effort!

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      That will certainly take a veeeeeeeeeeeeeeery long time then, as I'm working down the list of requests. Probably too long to be effective.

      If it's for the spirity contest I recommend you add your Novel to the google doc that's pinned on the forums for entries, maybe promote on one of those pinned threads.

      I went to take a quick look as I see you have a big following in another novel. That's a huge audience you can direct and send requests for reviews and feedback, even if it's just 3% of your readership. Would just be a lot faster and more effective than waiting around for my little review. Find out what your fans like, what works for you, has been working, and go from there.

      Quick impression with no real review:
      From the quick read through and the synopsis, it doesn't draw or hold attention. The impression it gives off is basic White American chick lit, with "two" weddings as a bridesmaid- doesn't really make an interesting impact, even for a slice of life. I say fix up the synopsis, add a little more personality to that Main Character or show more of the shenanigans she would be facing as a bridesmaid/ juggling wedding planner. Make us care for the main character or the supposed love she's going to be falling in.

      Because right now it feels (again I've only had a quick read over to form my impression so don't take it too seriously) like the pilot script of another oversaturated 2000s Hollywood RomCom movie mixed with a hint of youtube era modern about a "not like other girls". I get the 27 bridesmaid reference, sure. But it makes me shrug when as an American I have had those kinds of basic boring stories shoved in my face for the last 20 years?

      Very reactive (which is fine, plenty of stories use this style) but there's nothing holding us to 'caring' about the main character and her woes- which honestly don't seem like a deal (yet). Answer the readers by showing them "Who is she" and "Why should I care".
      Additional- I get the side characters are growing. I appreciate you keeping the characters organized as they're getting introduced. Some of their little interactions and sass is fun, but again make the reader care or want to care. (If I compare it to your other sports novel- that had an immediate 'care' hook with the MC. There's a struggle, an intriguing character, and a overall goal to climb and clamor over. This novel's synopsis doesn't give us any of her personality to gauge. The vagueness is too empty rather than intriguing or mysterious.).

      Good luck with the contest.

          CCmei lol I think if you look at my other novel, you’ll realize it’s a completely different genre. I’ve promoted there and got a few readers, but really not a lot of guys are interested in female-lead romance. So I could only count on my few girl readers, (maybe a couple guys), but they’re very biased.

          Just this is enough! Thank you so much. I really appreciate it this kind of feedback instead of the simple “I liked it” or “it’s okay”. I’ll be sure to change things up and do some editing. If you need any help, like a review in return, then let me know.

              xlntz

              Heeeellllllooooo it's been many months since that review was requested but it is up! I have done it. I have read up to 35% of this current novel for an as fair and impartial judgment as possible. Chapters lock at 89 but CH 71 a more than reasonable stopping point for me after the 'tournament' arc.

              Like others reviews, I don't judge on Update Stability or genres.

              I honestly feel tricked (bc I thought it was legitly detailed and I greatly respect world-building knowing how difficult that is). I like a lot of things that may have "influenced" this.

              It was named "Trust the Pathfinder" a few months ago but has been appropriately renamed to its sourced material. Magical Academy: Rise of the Supreme Magic Craftsman latest review has been posted under a spoiler.

              I hope this novel proves as a great practice to your own personal growth as a writer.

              https://www.webnovel.com/book/14679199606345905/Magical-Academy%3A-Rise-of-the-Supreme-Magic-Craftsman

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                  If your prime demographic was guys I can def, see why. It would be like pushing them towards another RomCom at the playback movie theatre.

                  Even if it was aimed at a female audience, you clearly have the skills to make this so much better (and so much less boring). I've been through the bridesmaid and bachelor parties, this didn't make me laugh or sigh in good times or the emotional feelings underneath it. It made me groan and reminded me of all the phone calls I've ignored. See you can totally make us readers feel something, now make us feel other things too (like why are these girls even friends bc the MC just sounds miserable the whole time).

                  I know how those "I liked it " "pls update more" comments/review feel. Would love substance _*

                  No need for a review back or anything (I'd be in the review swaps sections if I was looking for that so it's all good). I'm just one opinion out of ...the internet- so take what's useful for you from my 'not review' and make it your own. Good luck.

                    Want a quick and honest review swap? Well you got yourself a deal.

                    "Title": The Creation Stone: Victor King Mysteries.

                    "Link":
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                    "Tags": Mysteries, Reincarnation, Horror and Fantasy, System, Action, Adventure.

                    "Genres": Male lead( Fantasy male leading)

                    "Synopsis": The Creator assigned Benjamin to protect his saints. But they went missing.

                    Victor who is a wandering soul got Captured also along with the saints finds that there's more to creation than he ever knew.

                    He becomes the chosen one to steal the Creation Stone that doesn't appear to any man.

                    But rescuing Cannan made the journey a bit easier. after acquiring much knowledge and with the Creation Stone in his possession he rebell against the Authorities.
                    Now he is infected by an incurable physical abnormalities due to wrong use of the Stone.

                    You won't regret opening this book :)

                      CCmei Hi! Thanks for your reply~ Yeah I was a irritated by the troll not gonna lie, that’s why I wrote the reply in order to vent it out and get over it lol if I didn’t do that I would probs go to sleep thinking about it which, as both you and I know, is definitely not worth it for that sort of person.

                      Anyway! Looking forward to your review lol even though I have quite a lot of them it would be great to have some detailed criticism to improve even further in the future for the sake of my readers haha.

                      Cheers~
                      LBL

                          Blackturtle

                          What deal?

                          Please don't post blatant self promotions and open review swap requests outside the set allowed threads. It's part of the forum rules.
                          You don't even need to read the post, you can see them in the titles.

                          Users are allowed to link their stories if the thread topic is relevant, Such as people recommending stories in appropriate request threads.

                              LunarFlakes

                              Better late than never. It's up, A Villainess's Struggles full review and breakdown is up. I got through the most recent chapter (61!) and left my nasty popcorn all over the paragraphs as I reacted and asked questions.

                              Somehow this may be my longest review yet at over 1k words. Sorry for the wall of text.

                              I really like the genre, and I root for your characters- there's just waaaaaay too many plotholes in here.

                              The stability is a free 5 stars. But don't get your hopes down, a round of editing or some time plot & character directing would greatly improve this story.

                              https://www.webnovel.com/book/14544383305710405/A-Villainess's-Struggles

                                ElianaG Stop spamming.

                                Take just 10 seconds of your life to read a title and enough of a post to understand where you are spam linking in.

                                You can obviously afford the time.

                                  ElianaG
                                  This is not a review swap thread. I've replied to you before and you clearly did not read.

                                  Please stop spamming here.

                                  @yaoyueyi

                                  Can we do anything about this without locking the thread?
                                  I can still seriously review the normal requests it just takes time.

                                    6 days later

                                    Dee1 @CCmei I'll appreciate if I'm still able to get an honest review from you 🙏

                                        a month later

                                        Back to Necro my own thread- let the suffering continue.

                                          LadyKCH
                                          It has been 1000 years but the review for "Stardom Gone wrong" is finally up.
                                          It's a pretty niche category with the Western Reality show concept, which I feel can still be made to work beautifully. But there would need to be more focus on the shows- and a lot more social media. I also felt the interaction wasn't appealing/natural- with this genre people often go for the Youtube approach when showing how people talk or get along. It balances and evens things out, so we don't just hav boring and random bulks, with a bit of "exciting" focus on the male interests.

                                          https://www.webnovel.com/book/stardom-gone-wrong-(reader-x-yandere-males)_14885996705001605#review

                                          Thanks for waiting.

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