I can't say I have more advice for you, other than keep on writing.
I don't really have time to give specific critique
Not a review swap, but free collection adds
the blurb is bad, but the writing isn't.
AuHNG Oof I really need to improve my grammar lol. English is not my main language so it's a little hard for me. Thanks for giving my story a chance. We have different tastes or opinions so I understand. Thanks for the honest opinion!
I don't really like romance. Romance is extremely boring to me, unless it's fluff or just this respectful romance that builds after years of connection.
If it's a fl novel, I find that the guy is usually rich, usually "mysterious", "possessive", "player", and also extremely boring to me.
I read way too many romances when I was younger for it to be interesting for me, and most romance novels are girl--> guy and not guy--> girl. Though, I've also read a lot of harems, and disliked those, too.
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I'm just telling you that most high schoolers/college students curse. Some don't, but nobody really makes a huge deal.
The mc is way too innocent, but considering he's a "young master" type, eh.
I read up to chapter 20.
So, that's why I'm saying that it's unrealistic. In fact you could make the characters down a couple years, because highschoolers, even the freshmen go to parties and some of them drink. (Technically illegal)
All in all, the writing is not bad, but it's not phenomenal either, aka it's not something I would read simply because the writing is fantastic. A little too much tell in some parts, but first person novel, so I guess. en
Finished reading up to chapter 10, I believe.
Not bad, but too much info dump exposition at certain parts that bore me.
I despise reading that.
Anyways, I don't have anything to say about the romance. The story's ok, plot development is slow, I don't know where you're trying to go, maybe I shouldn't have skimmed the info dumps, but this is what happens.
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Also your writing is pretty good, tone down the complexity in certain parts.
Writing with too many hard hitting words will make the reader not understand, and writing too long will drown out certain words like white noise.
What I'm saying is you need some simpler sentences. AND SIMPLER PARAGRAPHS. Reading your paragraphs can be extremely ailing and mind-slogging since all of them are going into what I call "essay length".
That aside though, I really enjoy your writing. It's extremely visual.
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AuHNG Hey, I already add your book to my library. https://dynamic.webnovel.com/book/18425139706769805?utm_source=writerShare&utm_campaign=4314144361
Your novel is slice of life, so far. The prologue made it seem like it was going to be some sort of revenge/heartbreak story lol.
I just think you need to speed up the pace, work on your writing a bit, and the characters.
blurb has some mistakes.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/the-tenth-victim_18705056705660905
this is a thriller novel with lots of twists and mysteries!
ehh, your novel has some of the same themes as heaven's official blessing.
and I enjoyed 3/4 of that novel (HOB), (didn't really care all that much for the romance tho).
However, I don't really like reading your novel? Sorry, I dunno. HOB has mystery and humor, and a compelling intrigue that is established in the first chapter. I'll continue reading to see if my opinion changes later. Up to chapter 12 rn.
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link it next time, I'm lazy as a Cheeto, and a Cheeto can't move, y'know.
problems with writing and tropes. also use the author's notes, it's there for a reason.